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Some people think that art is important subject.other opine that it waste our time . discuss both view and give your opinion.

Some people think that art is important subject. other opine that it waste our time. YLRWd
In the modern era, all subjects are too much necessary for every one such is craft subject which is very beneficial for both workers as well as pupils. In this way some individuals claim that the pursuit is playing a significant role in child life, on the other hand, some people think that craft wastes our time. I will discuss both viewpoints and opinion in the upcoming paragraphs. On the one hand, those people who reckon that career is necessary for students. First and foremost step is that, since people know that school have all subjects except in the craft. To illustrate, in schoolteacher's focus on the good results of their students. They never guide about the business subject to the students, as students away from writing skills and concern on practical. If children get opportunity to having a business subject. It helps to bring out the hidden talent of the students. Probing further, some learners are not interested in education. Therefore school arrange functions from time to time, which are very beneficial for the students where offspring get a chance to participate in these programs. If toddlers do better performance in schools with the help of drawing, singing, dancing and many other performances. They are able to achieve honour from teachers and they can become famous as well as earn lot of money. On the flip side, different people have a different feeling. So that, some people claim that it wastes our day, for it receives lots of patience for being a successful person with the help of art skills. Some people spend money on arts and after that they loss their money. They become mantel and it affects their community. Therefore people feel that it is not a good idea to have an art prone. To conclude, every coin has two aspects. So that crafts have two both positive and negative impacts. It will be very beneficial for students to opt an art conditional in their life.
In the modern era, all
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subjects
are too much necessary for every one such is
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craft
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subject
which is
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very
beneficial for both workers
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as well as
pupils. In this way
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some
individuals claim that the pursuit is playing a significant role in child life,
on the other hand
,
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some
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people
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think
that
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craft
wastes our time. I will discuss both viewpoints and opinion in the upcoming paragraphs.

On the one hand, those
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people
who reckon that career is necessary for
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students
.
First
and foremost step is that, since
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people
know that school have all
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subjects
except in the
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craft
. To illustrate, in schoolteacher's focus on the
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good
results of their
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students
. They never guide about the business
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subject
to the
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students
, as
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students
away from writing
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skills
and concern on practical.
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If
children
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get
opportunity to having a business
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subject
. It
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helps
to bring out the hidden talent of the students.

Probing
further
,
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some
learners are not interested in education.
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Therefore
school arrange functions from time to time, which are
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very
beneficial for the
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students
where offspring
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get
a chance to participate in these programs. If toddlers do better performance in schools with the
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help
of drawing, singing, dancing and
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many
other performances. They are able to achieve
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honour
from
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teachers and
they can become
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famous
as well
as earn
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lot of
money.

On the flip side,
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different
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people
have a
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different
feeling.
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that,
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some
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people
claim that it wastes our day, for it receives lots of patience for being a successful person with the
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help
of
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art
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skills
.
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Some
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people
spend money on
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arts
and after that they
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loss
their money. They become mantel and it affects their community.
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Therefore
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people
feel that it is not a
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good
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idea
to have an
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art
prone.

To conclude
, every coin has two aspects.
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that
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crafts
have two both
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positive
and
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negative
impacts. It will be
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very
beneficial for
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students
to opt an
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art
conditional in their life.
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IELTS essay Some people think that art is important subject. other opine that it waste our time.

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
329 words
5.5
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