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Some people think that art is an essential subject for children at school while others think it is a waste of time. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

Educational system in most countries is becoming easier and easier every year. Students may choose limited number of courses and not study maths or science on advanced level; phones are allowed during the lessons; some countries in the world cancelled homework and so on, and so on. . . A lot of people, especially young learners, find this pace of learning comforting. Their reflections are based on phrases like “Why would a scientist need dates of all the Civil Wars in USA? ", or “Why would an artist need to know ways of logarithms solution? “. And I can partly agree with them. It’s quite clear that everyone needs to take basic courses including art, math, science, jurisprudence etc.
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IELTS essay Some people think that art is an essential subject for children at school while others think it is a waste of time.

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