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Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v. 111 v.66

Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. v. 111 v. 66
There is no doubt that university education is crucial for the development of society. However, while some believe that this education should be geared exclusively towards the fields that will be of practical use in the future, I agree with those who argue that one's choice of the subjects should be left to the students. Firstly, it is important to have professionals in the fields of technology and science for society to progress. This is because if we didn't have these experts, then we would have not had the infrastructure that drives the modern lifestyle. For example, aeroplanes which help in reducing the long-distance travels require an engineer to create and maintain them. The argument goes that, if the students are allowed to choose their subjects, then there might be a shortage of these workers. However, I believe that the students should be allowed to consider the fields they are passionate about. The reason for this is it is shown by research that those who follow their interests tend to work hard and excel in their field thus producing competent experts. For instance, a cousin of mine was forced to enrol in an electronics engineering course, today works for a small company earning a meagre salary. Conversely, If students are forced to pursue a particular subject by the university, they may not pour in much effort and become an expert in the subject. To conclude, although it is important for universities to supply competent professionals in the fields that might be useful in the future, In my opinion, it should be the choice of a student to pursue his passion considering that it helps to generate expert workers.
There is no doubt that university education is crucial for the development of society.
However
, while
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some
believe that this education should
be geared
exclusively towards the
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fields
that will be of practical
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use
in the future, I
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agree
with those who argue that one's choice of the subjects should be
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left
to the students.

Firstly
, it is
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important
to have professionals in the
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fields
of technology and science for society to progress. This is
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because
if we didn't have these
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experts
, then we would have not had the infrastructure that drives the modern lifestyle.
For example
,
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aeroplanes
which
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help
in reducing the long-distance travels require an engineer to create and maintain them. The argument goes that, if the
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students
are
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allowed
to choose their subjects, then there might be a shortage of these workers.

However
, I believe that the
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students
should be
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allowed
to consider the
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fields
they are passionate about.
The reason for this is
it
is shown
by research that those who follow their interests tend to work
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hard
and excel in their
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field
thus
producing competent
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experts
.
For instance
, a cousin of mine
was forced
to enrol in an electronics engineering course,
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today
works for a
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small
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company
earning a
Possible spelling mistake. 'meagre' is British English.
meagre
salary.
Conversely
, If
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students
are forced
to pursue a particular subject by the university, they may not pour in much effort and become an
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expert
in the subject.

To conclude
, although it is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
for universities to supply competent professionals in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fields
that might be useful in the future, In my opinion, it should be the choice of a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
student
to pursue his passion considering that it
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helps
to generate
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
expert
workers.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. v. 111 v. 66

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
278 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.5
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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