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Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v. 109 v.64

Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. v. 109 v. 64
Presently, the education plays a crucial role in everyone's part of life. So, certain people opine that universities should offer the courses to students in their interesting fields. Moreover, other people suggest, that these people should follow the curriculum, which helps them to utilize in the upcoming generations. In this essay, I will debate on both the viewpoints and suggest my opinion. Interestingly, most of the developed nations around the world encourage their trainees to study in their chosen fields. Firstly, Though these people choose simple subjects, but it helps them to excel in research activities. As a result, 90% of the students in the USA were ruling the IT industry because they were encouraged to study in their chosen areas. Secondly, even in life, it helps for students starting second innings. While most of the public gets depressed once if they fail in the business, but these people were never fear of failure and dare to start a fresh career. On the other hand, most of the developing nations offer a particular curriculum to graduates, which would help them in the future. Indeed, this kind of system is beneficial for a below average and average students. These people, which helps them to gain knowledge and improve in a particular area, would get guidance from the faculty. For instance, children who do not have an exact idea will gain more knowledge. In conclusion, universities should allow graduates to opt for their chosen subjects in order to gain knowledge. Nevertheless, the educational institutes should follow a particular curriculum for the students, which can be utilized in the next generation. Therefore, I believe that universities should offer courses for students to choose their subjects.
Presently
, the education plays a crucial role in everyone's part of life.
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So
, certain
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people
opine that universities should offer the courses to
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students
in their interesting fields.
Moreover
, other
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people
suggest, that these
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people
should follow the curriculum, which
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helps
them to utilize in the upcoming generations. In this essay, I will debate on both the viewpoints and suggest my opinion.

Interestingly
, most of the developed nations around the world encourage their trainees to study in their chosen fields.
Firstly
, Though these
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people
choose simple subjects,
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but
it
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helps
them to excel in research activities.
As a result
, 90% of the
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students
in the USA were ruling the IT industry
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because
they
were encouraged
to study in their chosen areas.
Secondly
, even in life, it
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helps
for
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students
starting second innings. While most of the public
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gets
depressed once if they fail in the business,
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but
these
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people
were never fear of failure and dare to
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start
a fresh career.

On the other hand
, most of the developing nations offer a particular curriculum to graduates, which would
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help
them in the future.
Indeed
, this kind of system is beneficial for a below average and average
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students
. These
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people
, which
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helps
them to gain knowledge and
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improve
in a particular area, would
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
guidance from the faculty.
For instance
, children who do not have an exact
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
idea
will gain more knowledge.

In conclusion
, universities should
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
allow
graduates to opt for their chosen subjects in order to gain knowledge.
Nevertheless
, the educational institutes should follow a particular curriculum for the
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students
, which can
be utilized
in the
next
generation.
Therefore
, I believe that universities should offer courses for
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students
to choose their subjects.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. v. 109 v. 64

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
282 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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