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Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v. 105 v.60

Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. v. 105 v. 60
It has been a highly mooted issue regarding to the allocation of the subjects to undergraduates. Many intellectuals opine that the students should have right to choose their favourite subjects in their curricula. While, others put more emphasis on the crucial subjects that will be essential for their bright careers. This essay will discuss both the views of the above notion, along with my opinion further. To begin with, the former view to provide importance of an individual’s choice in the tertiary studies. The pupils will be influenced to the interesting subjects and find their studies more innovative. Consequently, the concentration of the student would be enormous to their favoured subjects. Hence, the enthusiasm as well as an energy of the scholars will be maintained. For instance, the elective subjects offered to the students in their curricula will provide them an opportunity to expand their expertise in the field of their interests. As a result, the analytical skills of the students will enhance. On the other hand, the latter view is depicted more weitage to the vital subjects of the curriculum. The subjects such as maths and science are the predominant subjects to establish the prosperous career of the students. Although, many students find some difficulties in these subjects, they would get expertise into it with the consistent practice. For example, the mathematics is a rudimentary subject of many streams, such as an engineering, commerce and architecture. Therefore, the academicians are keen to introduce such useful subjects to the graduates, whether they like or not. In conclusion, the selection of the subject is very crucial task for the students and teachers. In my opinion, the students should be taught not only the radical subjects, but also one subject of their own interest. Hence, the education of the students will be enriched by this practice.
It has been a
highly
mooted issue
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regarding to
the allocation of the
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subjects
to undergraduates.
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Many
intellectuals opine that the
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students
should have right to choose their
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favourite
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subjects
in their curricula. While, others put more emphasis on the crucial
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subjects
that will be essential for their bright careers. This essay will discuss both the views of the above notion, along with my opinion
further
.

To
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begin
with, the former view to provide importance of an individual’s choice in the tertiary studies. The pupils will
be influenced
to the interesting
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subjects
and find their studies more innovative.
Consequently
, the concentration of the
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student
would be enormous to their
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favoured
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subjects
.
Hence
, the enthusiasm
as well
as an energy of the scholars will
be maintained
.
For instance
, the elective
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subjects
offered to the
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students
in their curricula will provide them an opportunity to expand their expertise in the field of their interests.
As a result
, the analytical
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skills
of the
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students
will enhance.

On the other hand
, the latter view
is depicted
more
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weitage
to the vital
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subjects
of the curriculum. The
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subjects
such as
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maths
and science are the predominant
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subjects
to establish the prosperous career of the
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students
. Although,
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many
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students
find
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some
difficulties in these
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subjects
, they would
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get
expertise into it with the consistent practice.
For example
, the mathematics is a rudimentary
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subject
of
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many
streams, such as an engineering, commerce and architecture.
Therefore
, the academicians are keen to introduce such useful
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subjects
to the graduates, whether they like or not.

In conclusion
, the selection of the
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subject
is
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very
crucial task for the
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students
and teachers. In my opinion, the
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students
should
be taught
not
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only
the radical
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subjects
,
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but
also
one
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subject
of their
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own
interest.
Hence
, the education of the
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students
will
be enriched
by this practice.
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IELTS essay Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. v. 105 v. 60

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
304 words
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Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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