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some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v. 103 v.58

some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. v. 103 v. 58
It is important to consider what subjects should be taught in universities. While some people argue that scientific and technological subjects outweigh the importance of art and music, others refute. In this essay, I will highlight both views and support the latter idea. On one hand, subjects as science and technology bring benefits that can be presented physically. To clarify, such subjects can aid in different inventions and explorations that can push the nation forward in the scientific race. Unlike science, art and melody lack the tangible evidence of its significance, and that is why some consider them as trivial subjects. For instance, Germany is known for its advancement in the car industry that made it one of top industrial countries and has flourished in its economy. A dearth in emphasis of the role of science in the development of a country would lead to left it trailing behind other countries. On the other hand, a significant role of craft and singing is boosting the creativity and ability to resolve different situation. This is because these subjects tend to be self-learning that can increase the self-dependence to solve a problem and to figure out new ways for the same result. These abilities can enhance the academic progress and teach abilities that are required for success in different aspects. For example, many presidents all over the world hold degrees in art subjects or music which can help them understand and mange human beings' behaviours. In conclusion, while scientific and technological curriculums provide the world with innovations, craft and music help to boost these innovations and also acquire other essential characters, such as leading traits and creativity.
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in universities. While
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some
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argue that scientific and technological
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subjects
outweigh the importance of art and music, others refute. In this essay, I will highlight both views and support the latter
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idea
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On one hand,
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subjects
as science and technology bring benefits that can
be presented
physically
. To clarify, such
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subjects
can aid in
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different
inventions and explorations that can push the nation forward in the scientific race. Unlike science, art and melody lack the tangible evidence of its significance, and
that is
why
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some
consider them as trivial
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subjects
.
For instance
, Germany
is known
for its advancement in the car industry that made it one of top industrial countries and has flourished in its economy. A dearth in emphasis of the role of science in the development of a country would lead to
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left
it trailing behind
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other
countries.

On the
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other
hand, a significant role of craft and singing is boosting the creativity and ability to resolve
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different
situation. This is
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because
these
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subjects
tend to be self-learning that can increase the self-dependence to solve a problem and to figure out new ways for the same result. These abilities can enhance the academic progress and teach abilities that
are required
for success in
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different
aspects.
For example
,
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many
presidents all over the world hold degrees in art
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subjects
or music which can
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help
them understand and mange human beings'
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In conclusion
, while scientific and technological curriculums provide the world with innovations, craft and music
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help
to boost these innovations and
also
acquire
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other
essential characters, such as leading traits and creativity.
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8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. v. 103 v. 58

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
275 words
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Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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