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Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v.46

Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. v. 46
Today, having a higher education degree is inevitable for everybody due to the development of the world. Students must select the best fit for now and their future life. Some people believe that in this situation individual should find and start educating in whatever they like, while others think that just subjects in science and technology should be chosen because of that these will be useful in future. In this essay both views will be discussed. On one side, people want satisfaction in their being. Students who chose their major on their interests and abilities are happier. For example, think about an engineer who wanted to be an artist. Someday this pupil maybe leaves his career and start learning his interest, but he lost some years. Dissatisfaction makes living difficult and based on researches individual who do not enjoy this job, get nervous and depressed. Therefore, it is better to let pupils to commence their higher education based on their likes to have a healthier society. On the other hand, the accumulated earnings of engineers and scientists is more than others. This leads parents to obligate pupils for selecting a field in such areas. However, this conclusion is not absolute, but in most of the situations comes true. For instance, ordinary engineers in all disciplines are wealthier than painters and musicians. This wealth, not only causes more satisfaction, but also helps to have a higher situation in social relationships. Thus, sometimes the obligatory for choosing the major is good to have better earning. To sum up, both views have their own opinion and think they correct. I believe that the students who choose whatever they like are live better rest of their life. The last point that should be mentioned here is that, in high schools, teachers should guide pupils for their future choices.
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must
select the best fit for
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now
and their future life.
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people
believe that in this situation individual should find and
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start
educating in whatever they like, while others
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think
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just
subjects in science and technology should
be chosen
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in future
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be discussed
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On one side,
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people
want satisfaction in their being. Students
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who
chose their major on their interests and abilities are happier.
For example
,
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think
about an engineer
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who
wanted to be an artist. Someday this
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pupil
maybe
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leaves
his career and
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start
learning his interest,
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but
he lost
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some
years. Dissatisfaction
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makes
living difficult and based on researches individual
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who
do not enjoy this job,
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get
nervous and depressed.
Therefore
, it is better to
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let
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pupils
to commence their higher education based on their likes to have a healthier society.

On the other hand
, the accumulated earnings of engineers and scientists is more than others. This leads parents to obligate
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pupils
for selecting a field in such areas.
However
, this conclusion is not absolute,
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but
in most of the situations
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comes
true.
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, ordinary engineers in all disciplines are wealthier than painters and musicians. This wealth, not
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only
causes more satisfaction,
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but
also
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helps
to have a higher situation in social relationships.
Thus
,
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sometimes
the obligatory for choosing the major is
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good
to have better earning.

To sum up, both views have their
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own
opinion and
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think
they correct. I believe that the students
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who
choose whatever they like are
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live
better rest of their life. The last point that should
be mentioned
here is that, in high schools, teachers should guide
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pupils
for their future choices.
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8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. v. 46

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
304 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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