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Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v.44

Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. v. 44
It is argued by some that all high school students must be allowed to study whatever interests them. While others say that they should study the courses that will be useful for their careers, such as technology and science. Although studying the subjects they like can enhance their overall performance in the finals, I believe learning important subjects is more important for obtaining a job. On the one hand, college students get motivated in education while learning their favourite courses. That is to say, they grasp the core concepts quickly and understand them with ease, scoring better marks in the exams, which will be apparent useful in pursuing their dream jobs. For example, the UK standardised a policy that all universities must allow their students in choosing their subjects to encourage various skills. However, I believe that this method will not be useful in fetching an employment opportunity. On the other hand, some argue that university students must be allowed to study those subjects which are important for their employment. In other words, information technology and computer science have got crucial value in the market and mastering these will fetch an individual with a job that offers high salaries. For instance, a multinational company called Infosys provides 80, 000$ per annum to a just passed graduate student who scored higher grades in computer related subjects. I believe that gaining skills in computer science are vital for building a career. In conclusion, although learning the subjects that students like can boost the final exam results, mastering the major fields like technology and science is crucial for a profession. It is recommended that universities make computer and technology courses a must for all students for a bright future.
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is argued
by
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some
that all high school
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students
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must
be
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allowed
to study whatever interests them. While others say that they should study the courses that will be useful for their careers, such as
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technology
and
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science
. Although studying the
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subjects
they like can enhance their
overall
performance in the finals, I believe learning
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important
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subjects
is more
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important
for obtaining a job.

On the one hand, college
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students
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get
motivated in education while learning their
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favourite
courses.
That is
to say, they grasp the core concepts
quickly
and understand them with
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ease
, scoring better marks in the exams, which will be apparent useful in pursuing their dream jobs.
For example
, the UK
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standardised
a policy that all universities
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must
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allow
their
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students
in choosing their
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subjects
to encourage various
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skills
.
However
, I believe that this method will not be useful in fetching an employment opportunity.

On the other hand
,
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some
argue that university
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students
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must
be
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allowed
to study those
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subjects
which are
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important
for their employment.
In other words
, information
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technology
and computer
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science
have
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got
crucial value in the market and mastering these will fetch an individual with a job that offers high salaries.
For instance
, a multinational
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company
called
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Infosys
provides 80,
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000$
per annum to a
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just
passed graduate
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student
who scored higher grades in computer related
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subjects
. I believe that gaining
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skills
in computer
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science
are vital for building a career.

In conclusion
, although learning the
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subjects
that
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students
like can boost the final exam results, mastering the major fields like
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
technology
and
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science
is crucial for a profession. It
is recommended
that universities
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make
computer and
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technology
courses a
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must
for all
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students
for a bright future.
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8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. v. 44

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
286 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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