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Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Compare and Contrast thes v.40

Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Compare and Contrast thes v. 40
The rise in misuse have been drastically increased in the world by each time. In my understanding, Duo to rise in the population increase the demand, which increases production but lack of recycling. The government can lead down some of the policies which can help in reducing rubbish. So in this essay we will talk about both side and provide with big picture with appropriate examples. Firstly, due to the huge increase in consumers, we use more and less recycling which result in decay. As peoples buying products a rate unpredictable the production of the companies also escalation due to which manifold amount of products are in the market, due to which we buy in more quantity then we required and we throw in waste which we don't use which boost the rubbish. For instance, earlier peoples use to repair the broken electronics, but now they just throw in the trash and tend to buy new one. Also, some time due to the offers we are pursued to buy food in bulk quantity which cause food misuse as well. Secondly, the government should put down some policies which results in recycling and there should be an awareness program to educate the people's about the benefits of recycling. The items which are not easily recycling such as plastic's should be banned and items which can be biodegradable, they should be buried in such a way that it makes the land fertile. With generating awareness about recycling and its benefits, the government surely can make an impact. In conclusion, in my opinion upsurge in overproduction and lack of recycling, resulting in wastage around the world. However, with the rise in awareness among the peoples and modifying waste disposal techniques, we can sure make an impact in reducing misuse.
The rise in misuse have been
drastically
increased in the world by each time. In my understanding, Duo to rise in the population increase the demand, which increases production
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but
lack of
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recycling
. The
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government
can lead down
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some of the
policies which can
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help
in reducing rubbish.
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So
in this essay we will talk about both side and provide with
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big
picture with appropriate examples.

Firstly
,
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due
to the huge increase in consumers, we
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use
more and less
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recycling
which result in decay. As peoples buying products a rate unpredictable the production of the
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companies
also
escalation
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due
to which manifold amount of products are in the market,
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due
to which we
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buy
in more quantity
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then
we
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required and
we throw in waste which we don't
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use
which boost the rubbish.
For instance
, earlier peoples
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use to
repair the broken electronics,
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but
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now
they
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just
throw in the trash and tend to
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buy
new one.
Also
,
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some
time
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due
to the offers we
are pursued
to
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buy
food in bulk quantity which cause food misuse
as well
.

Secondly
, the
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government
should put down
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some
policies which results in
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recycling
and there should be an awareness program to educate the
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people
's about the benefits of
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recycling
. The items which are not
easily
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recycling
such as plastic's should
be banned
and items which can be biodegradable, they should
be buried
in such a way that it
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makes
the land fertile. With generating awareness about
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recycling
and its benefits, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
surely
can
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make
an impact.

In conclusion
, in my opinion upsurge in overproduction and lack of
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recycling
, resulting in wastage around the world.
However
, with the rise in awareness among the peoples and modifying waste disposal techniques, we can sure
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make
an impact in reducing misuse.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Compare and Contrast thes v. 40

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
296 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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