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Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v.33

Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. v. 33
It is argued by many people that college students should be allowed to choose subjects they like to study. Others believe that beneficial subjects to students in the future should only be included in their study. I believe that everyone should be able to study whatever they desire. It seems certain that there are various reasons why many people believe that everyone should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future. The most important reason could be that the fields such as science and technology might provide countless job opportunities, high income jobs and career progression which could improve quality of life for students who take them. Another logical reason might be that by forcing people to choose particular university subjects as well as investing high technology in education and medicine, the government could ensure economic growth which provides citizen a better life. In spite of these arguments, some people and I believe that everyone should be free to choose their preferred areas of study. Students who study in subjects related to their area of interest could succeed easily and students’ mind could be relaxed and boost creativity. They might be motivated to create more innovative ideas by working in their passionate aspects. They also acquire satisfaction towards their occupation in future. To sum up, although it might seem sensible for universities to focus only on the key subjects, I personally support the system in which people have the right to study whatever they want.
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students’
mind could
be relaxed
and boost creativity. They
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be motivated
to create more innovative
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ideas
by working in their passionate aspects. They
also
acquire satisfaction towards their occupation
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seem sensible for universities to focus
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subjects
, I
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study
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IELTS essay Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. v. 33

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
250 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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