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Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. pursuing guaranteed v.3

Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. pursuing guaranteed v. 3
While some people argue that all students pursuing their tertiary studies should study whatever they enjoy studying the most while others take the view that they should only study the subject that would be useful in the future. Though students should be able to study what they like, as that would give them happiness, I believe that they learn to like the subjects that would be useful and then chose them to study. In this essay, both the views on what the university students should chose to study will be discussed. The students attending universities across the globe should be allowed to chose what they would like to do, in terms of academics, and what their career path would be. If they opt for the courses of their choice, they would be happy about what they are studying until they graduate, atleast the majority of them, and therefore they put in more effort, be more effective and hence, produce more output. For example, if someone chose to take subjects that is related to music, though their future isn't guaranteed, they would be happy that they are doing what they love to do. Even after graduation, they might be doing their dream job and succeding in that field, which would lead them to be contended as they are doing something that they are passionate about. On the contrary, choosing subjects that would guarantee success later on might be worth it. Going for those subjects, would later on give them the oppurtunity to do a job that offers high salary, though money can't buy someone happiness, it certainly plays a major role in making someone feel happy. For instance, if someone wanted to go on a trip, they need to have money in order to do so, moreover they can even afford a luxurious trip once in awhile, if they would have a high income. Opting for the subjects that are useful, like science and technology, would also help the nations in moving forward and developing further. In conclusion, though.
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whatever they enjoy studying the most while others take the view that they should
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what they like, as that would give them happiness, I believe that they learn to like the
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subjects
that would be useful and then
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them to
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. In this essay, both the views on what the university
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The
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students
attending universities across the globe should be
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chose
what they would like to do, in terms of academics, and what their career path would be. If they opt for the courses of their choice, they would be happy about what they are studying until they graduate,
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the majority of them, and
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they put in more effort, be more effective and
hence
, produce more output.
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chose
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that
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to music, though their future isn't guaranteed, they would be happy that they are doing what they
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love
to do. Even after graduation, they might be doing their dream job and
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succeding
in that field, which would lead them to
be contended
as they are doing something that they are passionate about.

On the contrary
, choosing
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subjects
that would guarantee success later on might be worth it. Going for those
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subjects
, would later on give them the
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oppurtunity
to do a job that offers high salary, though money can't
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someone
happiness, it
certainly
plays a major role in making
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someone
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happy.
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, if
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someone
wanted to go on a trip, they need to have money in order to do
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,
moreover
they can even afford a luxurious trip once in
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awhile
, if they would have a high income. Opting for the
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subjects
that are useful, like science and technology, would
also
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help
the nations in moving forward and developing
further
.

In conclusion
, though.
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24Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. pursuing guaranteed v. 3

Essay
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4 paragraphs
338 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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