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Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.29

Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. v. 29
University is a place that gives students different subjects to study. While some people claim that studying their favourite subjects is better, whereas others believe students should be allowed to study vital subjects like science and machinery for a bright future. I agree with the first part of the question whilst I cannot agree with the second part. This essay will discuss the reasons why students should study whatever they want. Universities offer numerous majors for learners. They are obtaining various fields which deal with colourful subjects. Some of them are related to real life, and the rest is into music, sport and so on. I agree that students have rights to select subjects concerning their interests. As a result, they can be more professional in their major. For example, if students are only interested in painting but studying automation under their parents pressure, it cannot have an effect on their life. Meanwhile, they will become a good painter instead of a scientist in machinery. From this point, I second the idea that students must choose their major considering their taste without any pressure. On the other hand, I disagree with the idea in the second part of the question because of two reasons. Firstly, every individual has their own skill in society. Some can be a good computer engineer, others can become a teacher or psychologist. In universities, many subjects related to our society, and it is really important for us to understand our status in the public and allows us to be a good member of it. Science and technology often cannot give this valuable information for us. These kind of subjects teaches us tangible notions mostly, but social subjects, such as pedagogic help people, especially teachers, to understand human emotions. Secondly, as I mentioned in the above paragraphs, every person has their own interests and skills. It is up to people to bring something new into society in their field. In conclusion, I partly agree with this statement, according to the reasons. It can be a proof for people in general, parents in particular, students should be allowed to choose their subjects in university themselves.
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students
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different
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subjects
to study. While
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some
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people
claim that studying their
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favourite
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subjects
is better, whereas others believe
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students
should be
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allowed
to study vital
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subjects
like science and machinery for a bright future. I
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agree
with the
first
part of the question whilst I cannot
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agree
with the second part. This essay will discuss the reasons why
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students
should study whatever they want.
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Universities
offer numerous majors for learners. They are obtaining various fields which deal with
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colourful
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subjects
.
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Some
of them
are related
to real life, and the rest is into music, sport and
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so
on. I
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agree
that
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students
have rights to select
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subjects
concerning their interests.
As a result
, they can be more professional in their major.
For example
, if
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students
are
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only
interested in painting
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but
studying automation under their parents pressure, it cannot have an effect on their life. Meanwhile, they will become a
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good
painter
instead
of a scientist in machinery. From this point, I second the
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idea
that
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students
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must
choose their major considering their taste without any pressure.
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, I disagree with the
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idea
in the second part of the question
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because
of two reasons.
Firstly
, every individual has their
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own
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skill
in society.
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Some
can be a
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good
computer engineer, others can become a teacher or psychologist. In
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universities
,
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many
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subjects
related to our society, and it is
really
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important
for us to understand our status in the public and
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allows
us to be a
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good
member of it. Science and technology
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often
cannot give this valuable information for us.
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of
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subjects
teaches us tangible notions
mostly
,
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but
social
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subjects
, such as pedagogic
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help
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people
,
especially
teachers, to understand human emotions.
Secondly
, as I mentioned in the above paragraphs, every person has their
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own
interests and
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skills
. It is up to
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people
to bring something new into society in their field.
In conclusion
, I partly
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agree
with this statement, according to the reasons. It can be a proof for
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people
in general
, parents
in particular
,
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students
should be
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allowed
to choose their
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subjects
in
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university
themselves.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
28Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. v. 29

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
358 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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