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Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both views and give your opinion v.2

Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in future, such as those related to science and technology. 2
The desire to make a successful career in life is one reason most people further their education by attending the university to study their dream course. However, some people are increasingly convinced that only subjects with futuristic relevance be studied by students, instead of studying their choice of subjects, as others would argue. Both views will be discussed below and my opinion stated in this essay. Today, most people believe that some fields of study such as science and technology is gradually taking over the world; hence the need to have more people delve into such field is desired. For instance, having more people study courses such as medicine would mean having more doctors, which is actually very important in our world today. Similarly, almost every sphere in life today has a touch of technological innovation for daily use. For instance, the use of technology is in every other profession such as sports, telecommunications, Banking, and Mass communication among others. Conversely, Other people feel the choice of a student should come first, as it would give them a sense of fulfillment. Today, most people feel fulfilled in doing what they desire irrespective of its relevance in future. The fact that they derive joy from doing what they want actually births the will to succeed more in that field of study. For instance, a recent survey conducted by the statistics department of university of Lagos revealed that most students who made poor grades were forced by their parents into studying what they did not truly desire. Consequently, these students struggle to achieve excellence, but the result is almost always poor. Furthermore, the importance of heterogeneity in the world today cannot be overemphasized. Musicians for instance, play a key role in soothing the soul of people, even though some individuals might see no futuristic importance in Music. In conclusion, there have been a growing debate on what subject students should study. While some people argue that students should only study courses of future importance such as science and technology, other feels otherwise and opine that student should study their choice. I am however of the opinion that Students should be allowed to study their course of choice as it gives them a sense of fulfilment and also creates diversity in the society.
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make
a successful career in life is one reason most
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people
further
their education by attending the university to
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study
their dream
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course
.
However
,
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some
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people
are
increasingly
convinced that
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only
subjects with futuristic relevance
be studied
by
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students
,
instead
of studying their
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choice
of subjects, as others would argue. Both views will
be discussed
below and my opinion stated in this essay.

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Today
, most
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people
believe that
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some
fields of
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study
such as science and technology is
gradually
taking over the world;
hence
the need to have more
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people
delve into such field
is desired
. For
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instance
, having more
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people
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study
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courses
such as medicine would mean having more doctors, which is actually
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very
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important
in our world
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today
.
Similarly
, almost every sphere in life
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today
has a touch of technological innovation for daily
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use
. For
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instance
, the
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use
of technology is in every
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other
profession such as sports, telecommunications, Banking, and Mass communication among others.

Conversely
,
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Other
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people
feel the
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choice
of a
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student
should
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come
first
, as it would give them a sense of fulfillment.
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Today
, most
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people
feel fulfilled in doing what they desire irrespective of its relevance
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in future
. The fact that they derive joy from doing what they want actually births the will to succeed more in that field of
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study
. For
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instance
, a recent survey conducted by the statistics department of university of Lagos revealed that most
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students
who made poor grades
were forced
by their parents into studying what they did not
truly
desire.
Consequently
, these
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students
struggle to achieve excellence,
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but
the result is almost always poor.
Furthermore
, the importance of heterogeneity in the world
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today
cannot
be overemphasized
. Musicians for
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instance
, play a key role in soothing the soul of
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people
,
even though
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some
individuals might
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see
no futuristic importance in Music.

In conclusion
, there have been a growing debate on what subject
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students
should
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study
. While
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some
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people
argue that
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students
should
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only
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study
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courses
of future importance such as science and technology,
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other
feels
otherwise
and opine that
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student
should
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study
their
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choice
. I am
however
of the opinion that
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Students
should be
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allowed
to
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study
their
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course
of
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choice
as it gives them a sense of
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fulfilment
and
also
creates diversity in the society.
18Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
44Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in future, such as those related to science and technology. 2

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