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Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v.19

Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. v. 19
The education that one earns from a university in a particular subject is called higher education. In my opinion, students have to adapt courses according to their own interest and the universities have to define certain pros and cons of each course. (42) If we look into the history, we saw that all the great students who made discoveries in future lives had completed higher education in a subject that exactly matched their future goals. Surely, all of them had not selected the popular courses like science and technology at the university level, but they had worked hard with full dedication in whatever course they studied in order to make histories. At present, students are offered a wide range of degree programs in many universities in almost all the professional fields like Science, Technology, and Business Administration. The students are also motivated towards new study options through career counseling and education expos. (107) In developed countries, many universities have introduced new courses for students in professional fields. They have designed course curriculums according to the needs of job industry. That is why students have shown more interest in them because of their wide study areas and improved employment opportunities. Due to huge advancement in Science and Technology, the demand for professional graduates will certainly fly high in the near future. Then, it will become mandatory for students to participate more in scientific and technical courses to achieve high positions in job Industry. (89) Thus, in my opinion, students have to give full freedom in setting their future goals and universities are only responsible to provide a guideline that which course best suits their study interests. (31)
The
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education
that one earns from a
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university
in a particular subject
is called
higher
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education
. In my opinion,
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students
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have to
adapt
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courses
according to their
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own
interest and the
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universities
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have to
define certain pros and cons of each
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course
. (42)

If we look into the history, we
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saw
that all the great
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students
who made discoveries in
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future
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lives
had completed higher
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education
in a subject that exactly matched their
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future
goals.
Surely
, all of them had not selected the popular
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courses
like science and technology at the
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university
level,
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but
they had worked
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hard
with full dedication in whatever
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course
they studied in order to
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make
histories. At present,
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students
are offered
a wide range of degree programs in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
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universities
in almost all the professional fields like Science, Technology, and Business Administration. The
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students
are
also
motivated towards new study options through career counseling and
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education
expos. (107)

In
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developed countries
,
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many
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universities
have introduced new
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courses
for
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students
in professional fields. They have designed
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course
curriculums according to the needs of job industry.
That is
why
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students
have shown more interest in them
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of their wide study areas and
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improved
employment opportunities. Due to huge advancement in Science and Technology, the demand for professional graduates will
certainly
fly
high in the near
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
future
. Then, it will become mandatory for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
to participate more in scientific and technical
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
courses
to achieve high positions in job Industry. (89)

Thus
, in my opinion,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
give full freedom in setting their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
future
goals and
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universities
are
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
responsible to provide a guideline that which
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
course
best suits their study interests. (31)
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
30Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. v. 19

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
275 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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