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Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v.1

Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. v. 1
Although it is sometimes thought that all under-graduate learners ought to indulge in those subjects which they adore, other people deem that their inclusion ought to be in both scientific and technical academics which will forge indispensable benefits for their better career. In my opinion, I opine that it is the prude choice of pupils to decide which area they want to be specialized in. This essay will discuss both points of view. According to some, allowing students to choose a course according to their desire can allow them to obtain their objectives such as planned career. Some brilliant students have planned their foreseeable future, before taking part in university studies. As an exemplification, a recent study by Queen’s University found that university graduates who attend like-minded subjects often do better in their forthcoming, as compare to those who are bound to study either suggested or fixed subjects. It is therefore agreed that having a satisfied course is a worthwhile way to achieve desirable goals in future. However, many people contest and argue that science subjects have more worth in comparison with like-minded subjects. Perhaps they believe that technology has becoming inseparable part of human’s lives, and certainly in upcoming decades the scope of scientific professions would increase rapidly in every realm of life, and there will be enormous job opportunities for science students. As a result, technological field students will subsidize more than other occupations. In conclusion, while people may vary in their opinions, I think that university students always choose their like-minded subjects for the progression of their destinations in foreseeable future.
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that all under-graduate learners ought to indulge in those
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subjects
which they adore, other
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deem that their inclusion ought to be in both scientific and technical academics which will forge indispensable benefits for their better career. In my opinion, I opine that it is the prude choice of pupils to decide which area they want to
be specialized
in. This essay will discuss both points of view.

According to
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, allowing
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students
to choose a course according to their desire can
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allow
them to obtain their objectives such as planned career.
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brilliant
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students
have planned their foreseeable future,
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before
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university
studies. As an exemplification, a recent study by Queen’s
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found that
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university
graduates who attend like-minded
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subjects
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often
do better in their forthcoming, as compare to those who
are bound
to study either suggested or
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fixed
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subjects
. It is
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that having a satisfied course is a worthwhile way to achieve desirable goals
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However
,
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many
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contest and argue that science
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subjects
have more worth
in comparison
with like-minded
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subjects
. Perhaps they believe that technology has becoming inseparable part of human’s
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lives
, and
certainly
in upcoming decades the scope of scientific professions would increase
rapidly
in every realm of life, and there will be enormous job opportunities for science
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students
.
As a result
, technological field
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students
will subsidize more than other occupations.

In conclusion
, while
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people
may vary in their opinions, I
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that
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university
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students
always choose their like-minded
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subjects
for the progression of their destinations in foreseeable future.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
15Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
264 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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