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Some people think that all universities students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both these views v.2

Some people think that all universities students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. 2
The ways to orient a students to have a well-paid jobs in the future have been a controversial issue, leading to the divergence of opinion on the subjects that they need to study in their universities. While some opinion that students should limit their subjects on some helpful one such as science or technology, I am inclined to the view that they should have liberty at choosing their favorite subjects. There appear to be some reasons for the choices of limited useful field studied in universities. First and foremost, learning in specific subjects that are necessary in the labor market may possibly open more job opportunities in student’s career path. One good illustration of this is students who graduated from science and technology universities with their excellent knowledge and research may have a well-paid jobs in suitable working environment due to the proliferation of technology. Additionally, orientating students making their choice on useful subjects which are completely potential provides abundant labor force, which solves the issues related to scare talents in some developing business fields. Notwithstanding the aforementioned discussions, my view is that it had better that students should be allowed to make their own decisions on their preferred educational programs. Studying with highly motivation as well as passion may generally advocate students put much efforts and try their best to achieve high-colored results. As a result, they would be more aware of their responsibility for not only their learning progress but also their prospect to commit to community and society. Furthermore, with the rapid growth of cutting-edge technology and modern life, it is difficult to predict exactly the potential trend of field that students should register to study. In addition, each person would have their own strengths and ability to be good at some distinct aspects of life. If they study in diverse subjects, it could balance the demand of market for labors with high expertise. In conclusion, for all arguments I mentioned above, it appears to me that the way to make decisions for some subjects in universities, albeit there are some potential ones that lead to wide job opportunities in the future, is suggested that learners have right to choose for a variety of subjects at their disposal. In general, orienting children from early stage to have them explore their strengths and find their preference play an important role in each person’s cognitive development.
The ways to orient a
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students
to have a well-paid
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jobs
in the future have been a controversial issue, leading to the divergence of opinion on the
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subjects
that they need to study in their
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universities
. While
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some
opinion that
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students
should limit their
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subjects
on
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some
helpful one such as science or
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technology
, I
am inclined
to the view that they should have liberty at choosing their favorite subjects.

There appear to be
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some
reasons for the choices of limited useful field studied in
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universities
.
First
and foremost, learning in specific
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subjects
that are necessary in the labor market may
possibly
open more
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job
opportunities in
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student’s
career path. One
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good
illustration of this is
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students
who graduated from science and
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technology
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universities
with their excellent knowledge and research may have a well-paid
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jobs
in suitable working environment due to the proliferation of
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technology
.
Additionally
, orientating
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students
making their choice on useful
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subjects
which are completely potential provides abundant labor force, which solves the issues related to scare talents in
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some
developing business fields.

Notwithstanding the aforementioned discussions, my view is that it had better that
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students
should be
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allowed
to
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make
their
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own
decisions on their preferred educational programs. Studying with
highly
motivation
as well
as passion may
generally
advocate
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students
put
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much
efforts and try their best to achieve high-colored results.
As a result
, they would be more aware of their responsibility for not
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only
their learning progress
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but
also
their prospect to commit to community and society.
Furthermore
, with the rapid growth of cutting-edge
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technology
and modern life, it is difficult to predict exactly the potential trend of field that
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students
should register to study.
In addition
, each person would have their
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own
strengths and ability to be
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good
at
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some
distinct aspects of life. If they study in diverse
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subjects
, it could balance the demand of market for labors with high expertise.

In conclusion
, for all arguments I mentioned above, it appears to me that the way to
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make
decisions for
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some
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subjects
in
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universities
, albeit there are
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some
potential ones that lead to wide
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job
opportunities in the future,
is suggested
that learners have right to choose for a variety of
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subjects
at their disposal.
In general
, orienting children from early stage to have them explore their strengths and find their preference play an
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important
role in each person’s cognitive development.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
27Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people think that all universities students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. 2

Essay
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397 words
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