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Some people think that advertisements are good for the society whereas others oppose this view. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people think that advertisements are good for the society whereas others oppose this view. YGOn
These days with an increase in population and due to that, increase of requirements, many companies have been established to meet these needs, and consequently, a competition for selling have been started between these companies. This topic has caused that the rate of advertisement gets extremely higher every day and people get bombarded with advertisement all day. In my concern, the existence of advertisement is necessary for improving quality of life however this should have a limit. The advertisement has become an inevitable part of society and industry, in the way that the survival of a company depends on their advertisement and, this has made the role of proper advertising in the profitability of companies more colorful than before. Moreover, society and people need to get familiar with all companies products to have the best choice and have a better life. For instance, a company in japan produce an awesome product and the person who lives in Europe will never know that something like this exists if there were not an advertisement. Furthermore, the advertisement can help people to find the best product in terms of quality and price. On the other hand, in recent years, the competition between companies in the advertisement has led to disturbing people’s normal life and in some cases, privacy violations have happened. To illustrate, the personal information of people is collected by companies which provide social media, and this information is sold to other companies, and they use this information for personalizing the advertisement for each person which is an obvious example of privacy violation. Furthermore, lots of these advertisements are to trick people to buy something which they don’t need and this will cause an increase in consumerism. To summarize, we can say advertisement is very effective, and useful in many ways, however, some company abuse advertisement for increasing their profit, hence people must be careful about ads.
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many
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companies
have
been established
to
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meet
these needs, and
consequently
, a competition for selling have been
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started
between these
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companies
. This topic has caused that the rate of
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advertisement
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gets
extremely
higher every day and
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people
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get
bombarded with
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advertisement
all day. In my concern, the existence of
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advertisement
is necessary for improving quality of life
however
this should have a limit.

The
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advertisement
has become an inevitable part of society and industry, in the way that the survival of a
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company
depends on their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
advertisement
and, this has made the role of proper advertising in the profitability of
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companies
more colorful than
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before
.
Moreover
, society and
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people
need to
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get
familiar with all
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companies
products to have the best choice and have a better life.
For instance
, a
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company
in japan produce an awesome product and the person who
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lives
in Europe will never know that something like this exists if there were not an
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advertisement
.
Furthermore
, the
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advertisement
can
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help
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people
to find the best product in terms of quality and price.

On the other hand
, in recent years, the competition between
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companies
in the
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advertisement
has led to disturbing
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people’s
normal life and in
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some
cases, privacy violations have happened. To illustrate, the personal information of
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people
is collected
by
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companies
which provide social media, and this information
is sold
to other
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companies
, and they
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
this information for personalizing the
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advertisement
for each person which is an obvious example of privacy violation.
Furthermore
, lots of these
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advertisements
are to trick
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people
to
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buy
something which they don’t need and this will cause an increase in consumerism.

To summarize
, we can say
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advertisement
is
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very
effective, and useful in
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many
ways,
however
,
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some
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company
abuse
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advertisement
for increasing their profit,
hence
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people
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
be careful about ads.
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IELTS essay Some people think that advertisements are good for the society whereas others oppose this view.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
315 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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