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Nowadays most green energy is becoming ever more prevalent in both developed and developing countries. Some argue they greatly reduce costs and are better for the environment, others believe they are a serious threat to energy security. Discuss both views and give your opinion. The world today uses more renewable energy than ever before since it contributes to the preservation of the environment and is economically sound; however, some argue that green energy could undermine the reliability of the global supply as a result of its dependency on climatic and meteorological phenomena. This essay will examine both views, but personally, I strongly advocate the adoption of renewable sources of energy. On the one hand, opponents of renewables claim that the world could face disruptions to the power supply should they be fully adopted. This is largely due to the fact that many green energy technologies currently in use depend on changeable and unpredictable phenomena such as wind, rain and cloud cover. To take the fastest growing sector as an example, solar panels can only be used in the presence of strong and direct sunlight, and although the problem of directness has already been somewhat solved with moving panel arrays, a cloudy few days could still result in a blackout if we depended entirely on solar power; something that is unlikely to occur today given current oil stockpiles. However, fossil fuels are a larger threat to energy security since they are certainly finite in quantity, whereas renewable energy is effectively infinite; once the Earth’s oil is depleted, there will be no energy security without green energy technologies. Furthermore, problems of unpredictability can be mitigated by improving battery technologies (to create a larger buffer), building more renewable energy generators (to increase supply during ideal conditions) and improving current technologies (to increase efficiency), such as in the moving solar panel example. Proponents of renewables therefore claim that they are the most economically sound option. To conclude, while many may believe that green energy technologies are a threat to energy security, the fossil fuels they frequently promote are a greater threat, and renewables are in fact the only sound option, both economically and environmentally.
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is becoming ever more prevalent in both

developed and
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developing countries
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argue they
greatly
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reduce
costs and are

better for the environment, others believe they are a serious
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threat
to
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energy
security.

Discuss both views and give your opinion.

The world
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today
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uses
more
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renewable
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energy
than ever
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before
since it contributes to

the preservation of the environment and is
economically
sound;
however
,
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some
argue

that
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green
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could undermine the reliability of the global supply
as a result
of its

dependency on climatic and meteorological phenomena. This essay will examine both

views,
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but
personally
, I
strongly
advocate the adoption of
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renewable
sources of energy.

On the one hand, opponents of
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renewables
claim that the world could face disruptions

to the power supply should they be
fully
adopted. This is
largely
due to the fact that

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technologies
currently
in
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use
depend on changeable and

unpredictable phenomena such as wind, rain and cloud cover. To take the fastest

growing sector as an example, solar panels can
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only
be
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used
in the presence of strong

and direct sunlight, and although the problem of directness has already been somewhat

solved with moving panel arrays, a cloudy few days could
still
result in a blackout if we

depended
entirely
on solar power; something
that is
unlikely to occur
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current
oil stockpiles.

However
, fossil fuels are a larger
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threat
to
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security since they are
certainly
finite

in quantity, whereas
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renewable
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is
effectively
infinite; once the Earth’s oil
is depleted
, there will be no
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energy
security without
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green
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energy
technologies.

Furthermore
, problems of unpredictability can
be mitigated
by improving battery

technologies (to create a larger buffer), building more
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renewable
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energy
generators (to

increase supply during ideal conditions) and improving
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current
technologies (to increase

efficiency), such as in the moving solar panel example. Proponents of renewables

therefore
claim that they are the most
economically
sound option.

To conclude
, while
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many may
believe that
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technologies are a
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threat
to

energy security, the fossil fuels they
frequently
promote are a greater
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threat
, and

renewables are in fact the
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only
sound option, both
economically
and
environmentally
.
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IELTS essay most green energy is becoming ever more prevalent in both developed and developing countries.

Essay
  American English
7 paragraphs
360 words
6.0
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