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Some people think that a person improves their intellectual skills more when doing group activities. To what extent do you agree? Use specific details and examples to explain your view. v.4

Some people think that a person improves their intellectual skills more when doing group activities. Use specific details and examples to explain your view. v. 4
It's often argued that individual can gain more IQ than compared to people who work together. However, I completely disagree with that opinion and think group activities can improve one's knowledge. So, I would like to add a few reasons below. Firstly, a bunch of people working together can raise individuals subject over a topic because they can share their knowledge and responsibilities while working on a task. We can easily observe that in many companies work can be divided among a group of individuals and also share responsibilities, From a recent survey conducted by the University of Cambridge, researchers came to know that 77 percent of people improved their intellectual knowledge because individuals can focus on the tasks and take responsibility and perform as a group. Secondly, working as a group is fun and increase passion to learn new information. Since I was young, observed that subject courses will be held for a bunch of students in addition to that there will be a serious competition among them. Recently, New York Times conducted a poll, and the results say that students improved subject knowledge in courses due to the competition additionally they made new friends. Lastly, if people work together work can be easily replaced when one left the company. If a person is working on a feature, he might have good knowledge of that feature and another reason might have less knowledge than compared to him. If he moves to another company, then another would find a difficulty to understand about that feature, but if we work as a team then if one left the company then it is easy to transfer knowledge. Since we are kids, we share knowledge, and share ideas. Therefore, I strongly believe that group activities will have higher impact on the individuals in gaining subject than an individual activity because people can share their game plan, tasks and ideas.
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responsibilities, From a recent survey conducted by the University of Cambridge, researchers came to know that 77 percent of
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is fun and increase passion to learn new information. Since I was young, observed that
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courses will
be held
for a bunch of students
in addition
to that there will be a serious competition among them. Recently, New York Times conducted a poll, and the results say that students
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in courses due to the competition
additionally
they made new friends.

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, if
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of that feature and another reason might have less
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than compared to him. If he
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then it is easy to transfer
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. Since we are kids, we
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, and
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ideas
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group
activities will have higher impact on the
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individuals
in gaining
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subject
than an
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activity
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can
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their game plan, tasks and
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8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
45Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people think that a person improves their intellectual skills more when doing group activities. Use specific details and examples to explain your view. v. 4

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
316 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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