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Some people think that a person improves their intellectual skills more when doing group activities to what extent do you agree? use specific details and examples to explain your view? v.1

Some people think that a person improves their intellectual skills more when doing group activities use specific details and examples to explain your view? v. 1
Many people believe that skills play a very important role in individuals' lives that is why nowadays schools and universities are focusing on involving their students in group activities. So that they can increase their younger ones intellectual skills which is convincing, even I also think in a same manner and agree to the given statement. My inclination is justified in the ensuing paragraphs Out of all the arguments, the strongest one to support my view is that group activities can save a lot of time, this is to say that in this contemporary world student believe in learning without putting any extra efforts because of this school universities and organisations organise such type of activities where humans can learn some professional skills like team work, time management, work management et-cetera. By doing this they can think out-of-the-box as well as they get better results in all domains whether it is a working field or academic. To support my claim I can quote an example of developed and developing country universities where they are focused on increasing students' skills instead of giving preference to academic activities. On the contrary, there is one school of thought that ''the more you learn the wiser you become", by which it is meant that some students likes to learn alone without taking help of others. Despite knowing this fact that studying alone "broadens individual's horizon and that thing can be used for enhancing their skills independently. Hence, it takes some time and efforts, but still individuals learn new things through different approaches. To exemplify this in a recent survey researchers has revealed that most renowned personalities like to solve problems alone or in a unique way. To put it in a nutshell, it can be said that both the aspects have their own advantages, but no one can abnegate the role of intellectual activities in humans' lives. As such, it is indeed true that if everyone understand the importance of group activities and their benefits, then no doubt this situation can act like a hand and gloves for all of them.
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why nowadays schools and universities are focusing on involving their students in group
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activities
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that they can increase their younger ones intellectual
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skills
which is convincing, even I
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statement. My inclination
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Out of all the arguments, the strongest one to support my view is that group
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activities
can save
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a lot of
time, this is to say that in this contemporary world student believe in learning without putting any extra efforts
because of this
school universities and
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organisations
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organise
such type of
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activities
where humans can
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learn
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some
professional
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skills
like team work, time management, work management
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et-cetera
. By doing this they can
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think
out-of-the-box
as well
as they
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get
better results in all domains whether it is a working field or academic. To support my claim I can quote an example of developed and
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developing country
universities where they
are focused
on increasing students'
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skills
instead
of giving preference to academic activities.

On the contrary
, there is one school of
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thought
that ''the more you
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learn
the wiser you become
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, by which it
is meant
that
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some
students likes to
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learn
alone without taking
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help
of others. Despite knowing this fact that studying alone
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"
broadens individual's horizon and that thing can be
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used
for enhancing their
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skills
independently
.
Hence
, it takes
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some
time and efforts,
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but
still
individuals
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learn
new things through
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different
approaches. To exemplify this in a recent survey researchers has revealed that most renowned personalities like to solve problems alone or
Consider replacing "in a unique way" with the adverb for "unique"; e.g., "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
in a unique way
.

To put it in a nutshell, it can
be said
that both the aspects have their
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own
advantages,
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but
no one can abnegate the role of intellectual
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activities
in humans'
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lives
. As such, it is
indeed
true that if everyone
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understand
the importance of group
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activities
and their benefits, then no doubt this situation can act like a hand and gloves for all of them.
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IELTS essay Some people think that a person improves their intellectual skills more when doing group activities use specific details and examples to explain your view? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
347 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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