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Some people think that a good diet and exercise are not necessary for a healthy and long life. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

Some people think that a good diet and exercise are not necessary for a healthy and long life. v. 1
It is thought by some that a balanced diet and physical activity are not required for being healthy and living a long life. Nonetheless, in my view, I disagree with the aforementioned notion, as a healthy diet and regular exercise can lead to a host of benefits including increased health, energy, happiness, and even a long life. To begin with, in conjunction with exercise, a healthy diet can reduce the risk of fatal and life-threatening diseases, such as cardiovascular, hypertension, diabetes and even cancers. Furthermore, eating healthfully and exercising regularly can help in losing weight safely and keeping it off. This can also help in maintaining our current weight, if not overweight, as well as reduce the risk of gaining weight as we age. Healthy foods are generally lower in calories and higher in nutrients than other foods, and regular physical activity burns off extra calories to keep a healthy physique. Secondly, a combination of working out and eating healthy foods can boost one's energy level and help them feel more alert and aware, both mentally and physically. Healthy foods give our body the nutrients and vitamins it needs to function at its best. Additionally, exercise stimulates brain chemicals that help produce feelings of happiness, contentment, and relaxation. Working out on a regular basis can also improve our physical appearance, as we burn fat and build muscle, which is a significant factor in boosting self-confidence and inspiring a satisfying life. Taking these points into consideration, I reiterate that exercise and diet are pivotal to determining a person's overall health and making them both a part of our lifestyle can make a dramatic difference in how we look and feel.
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that a balanced diet and physical activity are not required for being
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and living a long life. Nonetheless, in my view, I disagree with the aforementioned notion, as a
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healthy
diet and regular
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exercise
can lead to a host of benefits including increased health, energy, happiness, and even a long life.

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, a
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diet can
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reduce
the
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of fatal and life-threatening diseases, such as cardiovascular, hypertension, diabetes and even cancers.
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healthfully
and exercising
regularly
can
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help
in losing weight
safely
and keeping it off. This can
also
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help
in maintaining our
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current
weight, if not overweight,
as well
as
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reduce
the
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of gaining weight as we age.
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Healthy
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lower in calories and higher in nutrients than other
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foods
, and regular physical activity burns off extra calories to
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physique.

Secondly
, a combination of working out and eating
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healthy
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foods
can boost one's energy level and
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help
them feel more alert and aware, both mentally and
physically
.
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Healthy
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foods
give our body the nutrients and vitamins it needs to function at its best.
Additionally
,
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exercise
stimulates brain chemicals that
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help
produce feelings of happiness, contentment, and relaxation. Working out on a regular basis can
also
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improve
our physical appearance, as we burn
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fat
and build muscle, which is a significant factor in boosting self-confidence and inspiring a satisfying life.

Taking these points into consideration, I reiterate that
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exercise
and diet are pivotal to determining a person's
overall
health and making them both a part of our lifestyle can
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make
a dramatic difference in how we look and feel.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
19Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people think that a good diet and exercise are not necessary for a healthy and long life. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
279 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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