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Some people think teachers must be responsible for children not to eat junk food. Others believe that it is parents’ responsibility.

Some people think teachers must be responsible for children not to eat junk food. Others believe that it is parents’ responsibility. 7reg5
Educators are believed to have responsibility in urging youth to avoid consumption of half-prepared food by some while others put this burden on the shoulder of parents. Either of given notions should be scrutinized carefully to choose more advantageous one, I think. Some opine that mother and father ought to take control of what their children consume. This is because they are only ones who have greater influence compared to anybody. Until children starts going to school parents teach basic skill like eating, drinking. If they give an effort to provide well-thought discipline, especially in terms of having healthy eating habit, this would play fundamental role in ignoring food, take junk or fast food, when they grow up. However, I think this is insufficient to make children have nutritious products during their whole life. To make my point sensible, numerous reasons can be provided but I think the smartest one is an extra lesson that is organized by teachers. During that time when they can display detrimental effects of junk food consumption along with advantages of eating cleverly, this would be much more beneficial to comprehend ways of being energetic and powerful. This method could even give effect that is more positive when children are constantly rewarded for continuous consumption of useful products. According to Harvard University’s healthy part of psychologists’ research at American schools, when youth participate in sessions focused on proper eating, most of them tended to follow instructions and stay fit. To conclude, although parents seem guilty regarding insensible eating of their children, teachers should have more responsibility for that due to being indifferent for that and this was proven by the research of Psychologists of prestigious Harvard University.
Educators
are believed
to have responsibility in urging youth to avoid consumption of half-prepared
food
by
some
while others put this burden on the shoulder of parents. Either of
given
notions should
be scrutinized
carefully
to choose more advantageous one, I
think
.

Some
opine that mother and father ought to take control of what their
children
consume. This is
because
they are
only
ones who have greater influence compared to anybody. Until
children
starts
going to school parents teach basic
skill
like
eating
, drinking. If they give an effort to provide well-
thought
discipline,
especially
in terms of having healthy
eating
habit, this would play fundamental role in ignoring
food
, take junk or
fast
food
, when they grow up.
However
, I
think
this is insufficient to
make
children
have nutritious products during their whole life.

To
make
my point sensible, numerous reasons can
be provided
but
I
think
the smartest one is an extra lesson that
is organized
by teachers. During that time when they can display detrimental effects of junk
food
consumption along with advantages of
eating
cleverly
, this would be much more beneficial to comprehend ways of being energetic and powerful. This method could even give effect
that is
more
positive
when
children
are
constantly
rewarded for continuous consumption of useful products. According to Harvard University’s healthy part of psychologists’ research at American schools, when youth participate in sessions focused on proper
eating
, most of them tended to follow instructions and stay fit.

To conclude
, although parents seem guilty regarding insensible
eating
of their
children
, teachers should have more responsibility for that due to being indifferent for that and this
was proven
by the research of Psychologists of prestigious Harvard University.
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IELTS essay Some people think teachers must be responsible for children not to eat junk food. Others believe that it is parents’ responsibility.

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