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It is better for college students to live far away from home than live at home with their parents. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v.7

It is better for college students to live far away from home than live at home with their parents. v. 7
IT IS SAID BY SOME PEOPLE THAT, THAT IT IS GOOD FOR CHILDREN WHO STUDY IN COLLEGES OR UNIVERSITIES TO NOT LIVE AT HOME WITH THEIR PARENTS, BUT LIVE FAR AWAY FROM THEM. FROM MY POINT OF VIEW, THE BEST OPTION FOR STUDENTS IS TO STAY WITH THEIR PARENTS BECAUSE THEY WILL NOT FACE MANY PROBLEMS WHEN THEY HAVE A LOT OF STUDY TO DO. TO BEGIN WITH, IT IS THE BEST OPTIONS FOR SIBLINGS TO LIVE WITH THEIR PARENTS AS IT HELPS THEM FROM FACING SOME BIGGEST PROBLEMS. THESE TROUBLES COULB BE RELATED TO WORKLOAD AT HOME AS WELL AS AT OF SCHOOL. IN OTHER WORDS, THEY ALREADY HAVE A LOT OF PRESSURE OF HIGH STUDIES OR EXAM PREPARATION WHICH MAKE THEM FEEL EXHAUSTED. SO, LIING WITH THEIR PARENTS CAN HELP THEM TO NOT TO DO WORK ALSO AT HOME. MOREOVER, EARNING IS THE BIGGEST TROUBLE FOR THEM IF THEY STAY ALONE, BUT IF THEY WILL LIVE TOGHETHER WITH THEIR PARENTS, IT COULD BE SOLVED AS THEIR PARENTS MANAGE TO DO IT. ON THE OTHER HAND, THERE ARE FEW BEST WAYS FOR TEENAGERS TO LIVE FAR AWAY FROM THEIR PARENTS. FIRSTLY, THEY WILL BECOME INDEPENDENT. SECOND, THEY WILL BECOME AWARE OF THEIR RESPONSIBILITIES LIKE WASHING CLOTHES, PREPARING FOOD FOR THEMSELVES OR SHOPPING. IN THIS WAY, THEY WILL BECOME MORE RESPONSIBLE OF THEIR DUTIES WHICH WILL HELP THEM IN THE FUTURE FOR NOT STRUGGLING. I BELIVE, THEY ALREADY MATURE TO HANDLE ANY KIND OF SITUATION. IN CONCLUSION, I THINK, WHILE, THERE ARE SOME GOOD OPTIONS FOR STUDENTS TO STAY WITH THEIR PARENTS BUT, THE BEST WAY IS TO LIVE WITH THEM, WHICH HELP THEM TO SOLVESOME BIGGEST PROBLEMS DURING THEIR STUDY OF HIGHER COLLEGES OR UNIVERSITIES.
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STUDY
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LIVE
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PARENTS
,
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BUT
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LIVE
FAR AWAY FROM THEM. FROM MY POINT OF VIEW, THE
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OPTION FOR STUDENTS IS TO STAY WITH THEIR
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PARENTS
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BECAUSE
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MANY
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A LOT OF
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TO DO.

TO
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OPTIONS FOR SIBLINGS TO
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LIVE
WITH THEIR
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PARENTS
AS IT
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HELPS
THEM FROM FACING
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SOME
BIGGEST PROBLEMS. THESE TROUBLES
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COULB
BE RELATED
TO WORKLOAD AT HOME
AS WELL
AS AT OF SCHOOL.
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, THEY ALREADY HAVE
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STUDIES
OR EXAM PREPARATION WHICH
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THEM FEEL EXHAUSTED.
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,
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LIING
WITH THEIR
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PARENTS
CAN
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HELP
THEM TO NOT TO DO WORK
ALSO
AT HOME.
MOREOVER
, EARNING IS THE BIGGEST TROUBLE FOR THEM IF THEY STAY ALONE,
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IF THEY WILL
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LIVE
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TOGHETHER
WITH THEIR
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PARENTS
, IT COULD
BE SOLVED
AS THEIR
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MANAGE TO DO IT.

ON THE OTHER HAND
, THERE ARE FEW
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WAYS FOR
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TEENAGERS
TO
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.
FIRSTLY
, THEY WILL BECOME INDEPENDENT. SECOND, THEY WILL BECOME AWARE OF THEIR RESPONSIBILITIES LIKE WASHING CLOTHES, PREPARING FOOD FOR THEMSELVES OR SHOPPING. IN THIS WAY, THEY WILL BECOME MORE
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RESPONSIBLE OF
THEIR DUTIES WHICH WILL
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HELP
THEM IN THE FUTURE FOR NOT STRUGGLING.
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I BELIVE
, THEY ALREADY MATURE TO HANDLE ANY KIND OF SITUATION.

IN CONCLUSION
, I
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THINK
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GOOD
OPTIONS FOR STUDENTS TO STAY WITH THEIR
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PARENTS
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SOLVESOME
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BIGGEST
PROBLEMS DURING THEIR
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STUDY
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IELTS essay It is better for college students to live far away from home than live at home with their parents. v. 7

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
286 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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