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Some people think it’s better to choose friends who always have the same opinions as them. Others believe that it’s good to have friends who sometimes disagree with them. Discuss both views and give your opinion v.13

Some people think it’s better to choose friends who always have the same opinions as them. Others believe that it’s good to have friends who sometimes disagree with them. 13
Some people find it convenient to go for friends who share the same opinions as them because it is easier to communicate in the same language rather than always having to explain the reason behind their thinking. They don’t want to have to go through the pressure of over-explaining themselves which they find irritating. In some cases, it might be as a result of experience where an issue arose, and a consensus could not be reached due to a disagreement that ensued because they feel they know best and only their opinion should be considered. In other cases, most people believe it is beneficial to have friends occasionally disagree with them as it fosters growth and sustain the friendship. A typical example is when one friend thinks it is okay to put their feet up on the seat in front of them in the movie theatre because it is more relaxing, and the other disagrees because it is morally wrong. They can share their difference in opinion, but it helps them see from each other’s perspective which sometimes make them respectfully agree to disagree. My opinion on this would be to have friends who sometimes disagree with each other. This will encourage open-mindedness and help them see reasons from each other’s perspective. Following a disagreement every now and then, after viewing each other’s standpoint, they will come to an understanding which will further build up the friendship. Also, I think it will help friends respect each other’s point of view.
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of experience where an issue arose, and a consensus could not
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due to a disagreement that ensued
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they feel they know best and
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friends
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disagree with them as it fosters growth and sustain the friendship. A typical example is when one
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friend
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it is okay to put their feet up on the seat in front of them in the movie
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wrong
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help
them
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reasons from each
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now
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other’s
standpoint, they will
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come
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build up the friendship.
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16Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people think it’s better to choose friends who always have the same opinions as them. Others believe that it’s good to have friends who sometimes disagree with them. 13

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
250 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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