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Some countries today have passed laws against smoking tobacco in public buildings such as offices and restaurants. Other countries have no intention of doing this. Consider the possible arguments on both sides of the debate, and reach your own conclusion. v.3

Some countries today have passed laws against smoking tobacco in public buildings such as offices and restaurants. Other countries have no intention of doing this. Consider the possible arguments on both sides of the debate, and reach your own conclusion. v. 3
Now a day we can see in many public places, a poster or sign of "no tobacco/no smoking" is put up. Some countries feel that it is important to have laws against smoking in public places like restaurant, movie theatres, etc. , On contrary to this many thinks that it is not needed. In this essay I would discuss both sides and conclude with my opinions. As we all know that tobacco and smoking are injurious to health not only for those who are using it, but also for those who are along with people using it, according to a research by Time it is found that more than 50% of the people who develop cancer of the mouth, throat, etc. , are because of passive smoking. So, one should try to avoid smoking in places where many people are present. Moreover, not just cancer some people feel suffocating because of fumes coming from cigarettes. In addition to this, when you smoke in public places, many teenagers have habit of learning from others and when they find others using these things, they think it is good for them or it is cool to use these harmful products. To support this, Recently when I was shopping in the mall, I saw that a father with his family of 2 young kids were shopping and he was eating tobacco, when his kids saw that, they thought it some delicious candy and started asking his dad to give him one and when his dad said no and went ahead he went back and bought one for him. This shows why having these things can not only injurious to us, but also to our loved ones. On contrary to this, many governments believe that all citizens have right to choose and they are well aware of bad and good effects of using tobacco rich contents also it is up to them to buy or not to, how to use where to use and where not to. For example, many government have started printing the ill effects of consuming tobacco and using cigarettes on the packet of it so that whoever consumes are well aware what they are having and how it can cause harm. To summarize, I think the disadvantage of using tobacco rich contents in public places outweighs the advantages and hence, one much think twice before using it in public places.
Now
a day we can
see
in
many
public
places
, a poster or
sign
of
"
no tobacco/no smoking
"
is put
up.
Some
countries feel that it is
important
to have laws against
smoking
in
public
places
like restaurant, movie
theatres
, etc.
,
On contrary to this
many
thinks
that it is not needed. In this essay I would discuss both sides and conclude with my opinions.

As we all know that
tobacco
and
smoking
are injurious to health not
only
for those who are using it,
but
also
for those who are along with
people
using it, according to
a research
by Time it
is found
that more than 50% of the
people
who develop cancer of the mouth, throat, etc.
,
are
because
of passive
smoking
.
So
, one should try to avoid
smoking
in
places
where
many
people
are present.
Moreover
, not
just
cancer
some
people
feel suffocating
because
of fumes coming from cigarettes.
In addition
to this, when you smoke in
public
places
,
many
teenagers
have habit of learning from others and when they find others using these things, they
think
it is
good
for them or it is cool to
use
these harmful products. To support this, Recently when I was shopping in the mall, I
saw
that a father with his family of 2 young kids were
shopping and
he was eating
tobacco
, when his kids
saw
that, they
thought
it
some
delicious candy and
started
asking his dad to give him one and when his dad said no and went ahead he went back and
bought
one for him. This
shows
why having these things can not
only
injurious to us,
but
also
to our
loved
ones.

On contrary to this,
many
governments
believe that all citizens have right to
choose and
they are well aware of
bad
and
good
effects of using
tobacco
rich contents
also
it is up to them to
buy
or not to, how to
use
where to
use
and where not to.
For example
,
many
government
have
started
printing the ill effects of consuming
tobacco
and using cigarettes on the packet of it
so
that whoever consumes are well aware what they are having and how it can cause harm.

To summarize
, I
think
the disadvantage of using
tobacco
rich contents in
public
places
outweighs the advantages and
hence
, one much
think
twice
before
using it in
public
places
.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
29Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes

IELTS essay Some countries today have passed laws against smoking tobacco in public buildings such as offices and restaurants. Other countries have no intention of doing this. Consider the possible arguments on both sides of the debate, and reach your own conclusion. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
399 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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