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Write about the following topic: Some people think it would be a good idea for schools to teach every young person how to be a good parent. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Describe the skills a person needs to be a good parent.

Some people think it would be a good idea for schools to teach every young person how to be a good parent. Firstly, as we all can see these days the divorce rate is increasing day by day, and the extent to which kids are facing the challenges of their parent's mistakes. The very first example linking to it is nowadays, young girls are fascinated by young boys and if it goes well for a couple of months they start planning about their lives and having kids in the younger age we can say it 25. I believe that getting married is a bigger and important factor for the individual and before having kids there should be a deep connection between couples and that can be gained with a duration of time and when these couples have kids without a connection that creates a mess in child life if the parents are not understanding themselves then who will be taking care of the kid. In addition, To be a good parent we should have a skill set of being a good learner, stress management, Relationship management, Behavior management, good health, and to have it all we are getting taught in schools that how to be a good parent it will be very helpful to humanity because if we learn it well, we can raise our kids with a better life and good environment which makes our lives easier. Yes, I do agree that it would be a good idea for schools to teach every young person how to be a good parent.
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are facing the challenges of their parent's mistakes. The
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first
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girls
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by
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boys and if it goes well for a couple of months they
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start
planning about their
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kids
in the younger age we can say it 25. I believe that getting married is a bigger and
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important
factor for the individual and
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before
having
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kids
there should be a deep
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connection between
couples and that can
be gained
with a duration of time and when these couples have
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kids
without a connection that creates a mess in child life if the
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parents
are not understanding themselves then who will be taking care of the kid.

In addition
, To be a
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good
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parent
we should have a
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skill
set of being a
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learner,
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stress
management, Relationship management, Behavior management,
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good
health, and to have it all we are getting taught in schools that how to be a
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good
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parent
it will be
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helpful to humanity
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because
if we learn it well, we can raise our
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kids
with a better life and
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good
environment which
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makes
our
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lives
easier.

Yes, I do
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agree
that it would be a
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good
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idea
for schools to teach every
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young
person how to be a
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good
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parent
.
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IELTS essay : Some people think it would be a good idea for schools to teach every young person how to be a good parent. with this opinion? Describe the skills a person needs to be a good parent.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
262 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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