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Some hobbies are relatively easy, while others present more of a challenge.

Some hobbies are relatively easy, while others present more of a challenge. Personally, I believe that both types of hobby can be fun, and I therefore disagree with the statement that hobbies need to be difficult in order to be enjoyable. On the one hand, many people enjoy easy hobbies. One example of an activity that is easy for most people is swimming. This hobby requires very little equipment, it is simple to learn, and it is inexpensive. I remember learning to swim at my local swimming pool when I was a child, and it never felt like a demanding or challenging experience. Another hobby that I find easy and fun is photography. In my opinion, anyone can take interesting pictures without knowing too much about the technicalities of operating a camera. Despite being straightforward, taking photos is a satisfying activity. On the other hand, difficult hobbies can sometimes be more exciting. If an activity is more challenging, we might feel a greater sense of satisfaction when we manage to do it successfully. For example, film editing is a hobby that requires a high level of knowledge and expertise. In my case, it took me around two years before I became competent at this activity, but now I enjoy it much more than I did when I started. I believe that many hobbies give us more pleasure when we reach a higher level of performance because the results are better and the feeling of achievement is greater. In conclusion, simple hobbies can be fun and relaxing, but difficult hobbies can be equally pleasurable for different reasons.
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equipment,
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simple to learn, and it is inexpensive. I remember learning to swim at my
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swimming pool when I was a child, and it never felt like a demanding or

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challenging
experience. Another
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that I find
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and fun is photography. In

my opinion, anyone can take interesting pictures without knowing too much about

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the
technicalities of operating a camera. Despite being straightforward,
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taking


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is a satisfying activity.

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is more challenging, we might feel a greater sense of satisfaction when we manage

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, film editing is a
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level


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knowledge and expertise. In my case, it took me around two years
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became competent at this activity,
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I enjoy it much more than I did when I

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started
. I believe that
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give us more pleasure when we reach a
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level of performance
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the results are better and the feeling of achievement

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greater.

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can be fun and relaxing,
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IELTS essay Some hobbies are relatively easy, while others present more of a challenge.

Essay
  American English
21 paragraphs
266 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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