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Some people think it would be a good idea for schools to teach every young person how to be a good parent. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Describe the skills a person needs to be a good parent. v.7

Some people think it would be a good idea for schools to teach every young person how to be a good parent. with this opinion? Describe the skills a person needs to be a good parent. v. 7
Nowadays, parenting is considered a very important role in almost every society. I think that school students should definitely receive parenting training, and also believe that effective communication and teaching are two of the most important skills a good parent should have. One reason why parenting should be a school subject is that children spend a lot of time in their schools. For instance, in my country, Iran, they usually spend at least seven hours a day studying at school, which means they are likely to have enough time to learn and practice good parenting. Furthermore, they usually listen to and follow the instructions provided by their teachers much more effectively compared to what their parents or other people tell them because they have to pass courses and receive good scores in exams. Therefore, they can learn about good parenting skills from them more effectively. I believe that every good parent should be able to communicate with his or her children so that they can be friends with each other and there are no secrets between them. This would allow parents to guide their children better and protect them from the dangers of society. Besides, parents ought to be able to teach different thing such as the difference between good and bad, social skills and scientific knowledge to their children to help them become better people and develop better personalities. In conclusion, I agree that students should be taught about the skills and knowledge that lead them to become good parents in future. I also think every good parent ought to be able to communicate well and teach effectively.
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role in almost every society. I
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think
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school
students should definitely receive
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parenting
training, and
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believe that effective communication and teaching are two of the most
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important
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skills
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good
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parent
should have.

One reason why
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should be a
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subject is that
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children
spend
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a lot of
time in their
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schools
.
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, in my country, Iran, they
usually
spend at least seven hours a day studying at
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school
, which means they are likely to have
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enough
time to learn and practice
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good
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parenting
.
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, they
usually
listen to and follow the instructions provided by their teachers much more
effectively
compared to what their
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parents
or other
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people
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them
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pass courses and receive
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good
scores in exams.
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good
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parenting
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skills
from them more
effectively
.

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good
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parent
should be able to communicate with
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his or her
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children
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allow
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parents
to guide their
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children
better and protect them from the
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dangers
of society.
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,
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parents
ought to be able to teach
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different
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good
and
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bad
, social
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skills
and scientific knowledge to their
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children
to
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help
them become better
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people
and develop better personalities.

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, I
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agree
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about the
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skills
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parents
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parent
ought to be able to communicate well and teach
effectively
.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
32Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
Language shapes the way we think, and determines what we can think about.
Benjamin Lee Whorf

IELTS essay Some people think it would be a good idea for schools to teach every young person how to be a good parent. with this opinion? Describe the skills a person needs to be a good parent. v. 7

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
269 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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