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Some people think it would be a good idea for schools to teach every young person how to be a good parent. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Describe the skills a person needs to be a good parent. v.18

Some people think it would be a good idea for schools to teach every young person how to be a good parent. with this opinion? Describe the skills a person needs to be a good parent. v. 18
Nowadays, the parenting topic has been an issue spoken by many people. I believe that the school should include this topic as a compulsory subject, so that student acquire parenting basic skill in term of effective communication and upbringing method. parenting should be taught at the school since the youngster uses up more time in the school rather than in the house. For instance, they spend more than 7 hours a day studying in school. Hence, they would have sufficient time to learn and practice it in school. moreover, if parenting is taught at the school, the student will follow the teacher' s instruction effectively because they do not want to have a low mark on the subject. In my opinion, effective communication is a basic knowledge that should be obtained by young people since they will be a parent in the future. The research has been proved that the parent who has the ability to communicate effectively more often has a good relationship with their children compared to who do not master effective communication skill. Furthermore, the role of the parent in every society not only as of the person that gave birth to the children, but they are also a companion and a teacher their children. In conclusion, I agree that parenting is necessary to be taught to the children since it would prepare them to be a good parent in the future. moreover, I believe the good parent ideally should have the ability to communicate and to educate their children effectively.
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topic has been an issue spoken by
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many
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people
. I believe that the
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school
should include this topic as a compulsory subject,
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that student acquire
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parenting
basic
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skill
in term of effective communication and upbringing method.

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parenting
should
be taught
at the
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school
since the youngster
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uses
up more time in the
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school
rather
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house
.
For instance
, they spend more than 7 hours a day studying in
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school
.
Hence
, they would have sufficient time to learn and practice it in
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school
.
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moreover
, if
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parenting
is taught
at the
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school
, the student will follow the
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effectively
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they do not want to have a low mark on the subject.

In my opinion, effective communication is
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a basic knowledge
that should
be obtained
by young
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people
since they will be a
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parent
in the future. The research has
been proved
that the
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parent
who has the ability to communicate
effectively
more
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often
has a
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good
relationship with their
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children
compared to
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who
do not master effective communication
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skill
.
Furthermore
, the role of the
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parent
in every society not
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as of the person that gave birth to the
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children
,
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they are
also
a companion and a teacher their children.

In conclusion
, I
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agree
that
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parenting
is necessary to
be taught
to the
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children
since it would prepare them to be a
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good
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parent
in the future.
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moreover
, I believe the
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good
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parent
ideally
should have the ability to communicate and to educate their
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children
effectively
.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
19Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think it would be a good idea for schools to teach every young person how to be a good parent. with this opinion? Describe the skills a person needs to be a good parent. v. 18

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
254 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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