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Some people think it would be a good idea for schools to teach every young person how to be a good parent. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Describe the skills a person needs to be a good parent. v.13

Some people think it would be a good idea for schools to teach every young person how to be a good parent. with this opinion? Describe the skills a person needs to be a good parent. v. 13
Every new generation is the building block of its future society; therefore, responsible parenting is an undisputed desirable behaviour. Being a good parent is predicated by building on ones personal experiences. Hence, despite the notion that parenting practices need to be included in school syllabuses, I conjecture that it would be more effective to deliver such education at a later stage of life: just before marriage. Good parenting practices require adeptness that is acquired through experience. In the early stages of education, at school, teenagers need to obtain basic survival competencies. For example, they need to learn communication abilities, which will allow them to build successful careers. Similarly, every stage of life entails different skills. As young adults reach a point in their lives, where they decide to get married, teaching them parenting skills becomes a priority. For example, in Singapore parenting is taught right before actual marriage. Successful parenting requires allowing discretion and teaching basic values. I believe that for a person to realise his potential, he need to be given the freedom to make major decisions in his life. Strident parents' opinions debilitate the creativity of their children. However, it is obviously crucial for parents preach universal human values, such as truthfulness, integrity and the likes. Therefore, a parent’s role is to assist and not to control the younger generation. In short, parenting skills are germane to individuals who have made the choice of starting a family; those are the people who, evidently, need to understand the effective parenting practices: teaching basic values and allowing for the freedom of decision.
Every new generation is the building block of its future society;
therefore
, responsible
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parenting
is an undisputed desirable
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behaviour
. Being a
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good
parent
is predicated
by building on ones personal experiences.
Hence
, despite the notion that
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parenting
practices
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need
to
be included
in school syllabuses, I conjecture that it would be more effective to deliver such education at a later stage of life:
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just
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before
marriage.

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Good
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parenting
practices require adeptness that
is acquired
through experience. In the early stages of education, at school,
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teenagers
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need
to obtain basic survival competencies.
For example
, they
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need
to learn communication abilities, which will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
allow
them to build successful careers.
Similarly
, every stage of life entails
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different
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skills
. As young adults reach a point in their
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lives
, where they decide to
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get
married, teaching them
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parenting
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skills
becomes a priority.
For example
, in Singapore
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parenting
is taught
right
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before
actual marriage.

Successful
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parenting
requires allowing discretion and teaching basic values. I believe that for a person to
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realise
his potential, he
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need
to be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
the freedom to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
major decisions in his life. Strident parents' opinions debilitate the creativity of their children.
However
, it is
obviously
crucial for parents preach universal human values, such as truthfulness, integrity and the likes.
Therefore
, a parent’s role is to assist and not to control the younger generation.

In short,
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parenting
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
are germane to individuals who have made the choice of starting a family; those are the
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people
who,
evidently
,
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need
to understand the effective
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
parenting
practices: teaching basic values and allowing for the freedom of decision.
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8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people think it would be a good idea for schools to teach every young person how to be a good parent. with this opinion? Describe the skills a person needs to be a good parent. v. 13

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
262 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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