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some people think it is important to work in council of europe

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To Whom it may concern, Thank you for the opportunity to apply for the Traineeship in Council of Europe- the secretariat of the parliamentary assembly. I strongly believe that the road of democratization and westernization that Georgia chose from the very beginning of its independence is the only right way of development. However, there is a lot to be done to strengthen the main political institutions, where I see my role and the future path of life. Believing in democratization and transparency, I have always tried to contribute to the process of my country's development through civic engagement, volunteering, community development, teaching, and youth work but after academic achievements and knowledge, I assume, my future career will be connected to Georgian Parlament and its structures. I see the opportunity of working in the Council of Europe as a preparation to implement learning and gained knowledge in Georgia, I do believe that the traineeship would not only enhance my professional development but also become another important platform for me to contribute to the democratization process of Georgia. Therefore, for me, the internship will be a once-in-a-lifetime opportunity to join the Council of Europe’s robust global network and 5 months with like-minded professionals who are equally as committed to democratization and human rights, as for me. I look forward to attending an interview and providing you with further details about my motivation. Thank you for taking the time to consider my application, and I hope for our future contact.
To Whom it may concern,

Thank you for the opportunity to apply for the Traineeship in Council of Europe- the secretariat of the parliamentary assembly.

I
strongly
believe that the road of democratization and
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westernization
that Georgia chose from the
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very
beginning of its independence is the
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only
right way of
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development
.
However
, there is a lot to
be done
to strengthen the main political institutions, where I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
my role and the future path of life.

Believing in democratization and transparency, I have always tried to contribute to the process of my country's
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
development
through civic engagement, volunteering, community
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
development
, teaching, and youth work
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but
after academic achievements and knowledge, I assume, my future career will
be connected
to Georgian
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Parlament
and its structures. I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
the opportunity of working in the Council of Europe as a preparation to implement learning and gained knowledge in Georgia,

I do believe that the traineeship would not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
enhance my professional
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
development
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
also
become another
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important
platform for me to contribute to the democratization process of Georgia.
Therefore
, for me, the internship will be a once-in-a-lifetime opportunity to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
join
the Council of Europe’s robust global network and 5 months with like-minded professionals who are
Use either "equally" or "as" on its own. When comparing two nouns, use "just as".
equally as
committed to democratization and human rights, as for me.

I look forward to attending an interview and providing you with
further
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
details
about my motivation. Thank you for taking the time to consider my application, and I hope for our future contact.
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IELTS essay some people think it is important to work in council of europe

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  American English
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