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Some people think it is good to be ambitious How important is to be ambitious Is it positive or negative to have such characteristics Answer questions through the lens of your experience v.2

Some people think it is good to be ambitious How important is to be ambitious Is it positive or negative to have such characteristics Answer questions through the lens of your experience v. 2
It is true that every person’s success depends on their mentality. some of them think being ambitious having positive effect upon success. This essay will discuss how important it is to be eager and what are the benefits it gives to a person from my experience. First of all, being progressive motivate a person towards their goals. Specially in my experience being ambitious helps me to become who I am now as a system administrator. In most cases people who have eager to learn or work have high success rate. Although there are some people with negative mind sets, a person who are committed to their goals are highlighted within the organization as well as in the society. Secondly, it is good to have ambitious characteristics as a person. Not only it makes that person think positive, but also it ignores the negative thoughts from your mind. So that, it helps the person’s mind to be stress free. In addition, a person with go-getter mentality is highly valued by the organization he works for and also by the society. In my experience, I always like to learn new things and face whatever challenges I meet, so that it helps me to gain knowledge and experience in every situation. Moreover, a motivated person always be active towards any situation which helps him to achieve his goals faster than the normal person. In conclusion, every organization values people who are ambitious which helps the organization to be successful. Being committed to their work or their goals makes the individual successful, which means a motivated mind is the key for the success.
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success
. This essay will discuss how
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important
it is to be eager and what are the benefits it gives to a
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person
from my experience.

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, being progressive motivate a
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person
towards their
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goals
.
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in my experience being
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ambitious
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helps
me to become
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who
I am
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now
as a system administrator.
In most cases
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who
have eager to learn or work have high
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rate. Although there are
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people
with
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negative
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mind
sets, a
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person
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who
are committed
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are highlighted
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organization
as well
as in the society.

Secondly
, it is
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characteristics as a
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. Not
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.
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to be
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free.
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with go-getter mentality is
highly
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he works for and
also
by the society. In my experience, I always like to learn new things and face whatever challenges I
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me to gain knowledge and experience in every situation.
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active towards any situation which
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helps
him to achieve his
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faster than the normal person.

In conclusion
, every
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organization
values
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people
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who
are
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which
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to be successful.
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to their work or their
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goals
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makes
the individual successful, which means a motivated
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mind
is the key for the
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success
.
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38Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people think it is good to be ambitious How important is to be ambitious Is it positive or negative to have such characteristics Answer questions through the lens of your experience v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
269 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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