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Some people think international car free days are an effective way of reducing air pollution, others think there are some other ways. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. v.4

Some people think international car free days are an effective way of reducing air pollution, others think there are some other ways. v. 4
Pollution is beyond doubt, a raging issue. Numerous steps are being taken by governments across the world to combat this. No-cars day is one such initiative which was being followed in most countries to combat greenhouse gasses. While some believe this is an effective approach, others argue there are alternatives. In this essay, I am going to discuss both the views and express my thoughts as well. Car-free days are being practised in many countries. However, there are no standards defined on a global scale. Many believe international car-free days are very effective in fighting air-pollution. Because, if implemented, this will raise awareness among the citizens and spread like a chain reaction. For example, in New Delhi alone, there are three million vehicles plying on the road every day. If at least one third of these are taken off the road, a few tonnes of poisonous gases are stopped from getting released into the atmosphere. This may be just a drop in the ocean, but it becomes significant on a global scale when everybody follows. On the other hand, many argue there are more efficient ways to deal with pollution like using non emitting vehicles, curbs on industries, planting trees. Many countries are contemplating a complete ban on polluting vehicles in the next couple of years. By this, they are achieving the desired results without compromising on the comfort of citizens which makes it more effective. These are implemented in Scandinavian countries and are proven to be quite effective. Secondly, there are suggestions, to stop non eco-friendly constructions, restrictions on polluting industries etc. These are effective because vehicular emission contributes only to 10% of total air pollution. Having discussed about both these views, I strongly believe that while international car free days may not be as efficient as the other methods, it helps in raising awareness. Also, there are a few shortcomings in the latter approaches. The efficient methods come at a cost and many countries are not ready to invest. To conclude, I agree that international car free days are not so effective but it is our only choice till we get a cheaper alternative.
Pollution is beyond doubt, a raging issue. Numerous steps are
being taken
by
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governments
across the world to combat this. No-cars day is one such initiative which was
being followed
in most
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countries
to combat greenhouse gasses. While
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some
believe this is an
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effective
approach, others argue there are alternatives. In this essay, I am going to discuss both the views and express my thoughts
as well
.

Car-free days are being
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practised
in
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many
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countries
.
However
, there are no standards defined on a global scale.
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Many
believe international car-free days are
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very
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effective
in fighting air-pollution.
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Because
, if implemented, this will raise awareness among the citizens and spread like a chain reaction.
For example
, in New Delhi alone, there are three million vehicles plying on the road every day. If at least one third of these
are taken
off the road, a few tonnes of poisonous gases are
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stopped
from getting released into the atmosphere. This may be
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just
a drop in the ocean,
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but
it becomes significant on a global scale when everybody follows.

On the other hand
,
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many
argue there are more efficient ways to deal with pollution like using non emitting vehicles, curbs on industries, planting trees.
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Many
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countries
are contemplating a complete ban on polluting vehicles in the
next
couple of years. By this, they are achieving the desired results without compromising on the comfort of citizens which
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makes
it more
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effective
. These
are implemented
in Scandinavian
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countries
and
are proven
to be quite
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effective
.
Secondly
, there are suggestions, to
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stop
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non eco-friendly
constructions, restrictions on polluting industries etc. These are
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effective
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because
vehicular emission contributes
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only
to 10% of total air pollution.

Having
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discussed about both
these views, I
strongly
believe that while international car free days may not be as efficient as the other methods, it
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helps
in raising awareness.
Also
, there are a few shortcomings in the latter approaches. The efficient methods
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come
at a cost and
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many
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countries
are not ready to invest.
To conclude
, I
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agree
that international car free days are not
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so
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effective
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but
it is our
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only
choice till we
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get
a cheaper alternative.
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IELTS essay Some people think international car free days are an effective way of reducing air pollution, others think there are some other ways. v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
356 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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