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Some people believe that to be successful in a sport, natural ability is necessary while others think hard work and practice is more important. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.5

Some people believe that to be successful in a sport, natural ability is necessary while others think hard work and practice is more important. v. 5
There is a debate about the superiority between talent and constant practice which records success in sport. In my opinion, I will say commitment to development is the password to set record in sport. This is because consistency in the place of practice brings one into perfection. To bring with, it is believed that talent which is also called natural ability is a God giving asset to be prosperous in life. This is because, a talented sport man will always find playing his game as having fun. In addition, he loves what he does and will always entertain her fans. For example, the best player in the world by name Leo Messi is a talented footballer. On the other hand, greater number of people project that constant training can make one excel in sport. This is because there is always a reward for hard work. Furthermore, when people say ‘practice makes perfect’; it implies that commitment, consistency, dedication and diligence to practice are necessary. Moreover, some people discover and develop great skills practicing. I agree with opinion because an athlete can be talented but if he does not develop it in the place of training, there will be great skills he may not discover neither will he develop it. For example, African best footballer J. J Okocha is a typical example of a spot man who was determined to prosper in soccer. In conclusion, while people share their ideas on who is more successful between being talented and one who learn how to play football, in my opinion, practicing how to play football is very essential to be a great footballer because, no one can down play self-development, it fine tune people.
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which records success in
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sport
. In my opinion, I will say commitment to development is the password to set record in
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sport
. This is
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because
consistency in the place of
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brings one into perfection.

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is believed
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talented
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sport
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man
will always find playing his game as having fun.
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, he
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loves
what he does and will always entertain her fans.
For example
, the best player in the world by name Leo Messi is a
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talented
footballer.

On the other hand
, greater number of
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people
project that constant training can
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make
one excel in
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sport
. This is
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because
there is always a reward for
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hard
work.
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say
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‘practice
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makes
perfect’; it implies that commitment, consistency, dedication and diligence to
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are necessary.
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discover and develop great
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with opinion
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, African best footballer J. J
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is a typical example of a spot
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who
was determined
to prosper in soccer.

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people
share their
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ideas
on who is more successful between being
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talented
and one who learn how to play football, in my opinion, practicing how to play football is
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essential to be a great footballer
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IELTS essay Some people believe that to be successful in a sport, natural ability is necessary while others think hard work and practice is more important. v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
282 words
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Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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