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Some people think individuals cannot do anything to make the environment different, others think they can. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.1

Some people think individuals cannot do anything to make the environment different, others think they can. v. 1
The environment is crucial for an individual and the social. However, over the last decade, because of global warming, the earth is getting hotter. That is why the concern of the degrading environment is at the peak, resulting in a dozen debates on who should be responsible for the future of our generation. Some people believe that individuals cannot do anything to make the environment different, in contrary, others think that they should in charge of what they have done. In my opinion, I strongly agree that each people should team up to solve the environmental issues. On the one hand, human activities are major factors causing the overhearing throughout history such as people agreed to all the factories did a massive product of vehicles to help them travel around comfortably, or they did not concern about the companies dumped the rubbishes and dangerous materials into the rivers and the oceans. Therefore, each individual instead of going by public transport, for example, buses, cars, motorbikes, and so on should go walk or use a bicycle to their offices. It not only helps people healthier and keeps fit but it also can be a word to say reject to companies using fossil fuels emit hazardous gases into our aerial. Moreover, a human can grow the trees in his/her house due to its huge advantages. On the other hand, the government should take action for environmental problems because they have more power than individuals. For example, Belgium's authorities announced that polluting vehicles will not be allowed to enter the center city in order to reduce the emissions. This action immediately received many positive feedbacks from the city-dwellers and neighboring countries. In conclusion, the problem of the environment should be tackled by both individuals and governments. I believe our nature will be cleaner in someday.
The
environment
is crucial for an
individual
and the social.
However
, over the last decade,
because
of global warming, the earth is getting hotter.
That is
why the concern of the degrading
environment
is at the peak, resulting in a dozen debates on who should be responsible for the future of our generation.
Some
people
believe that
individuals
cannot do anything to
make
the
environment
different
, in contrary, others
think
that they should in charge of what they have done. In my opinion, I
strongly
agree
that each
people
should team up to solve the environmental issues.

On the one hand, human activities are major factors causing the overhearing throughout history such as
people
agreed
to all the factories did a massive product of vehicles to
help
them travel around
comfortably
, or they did not concern about the
companies
dumped the rubbishes and
dangerous
materials into the rivers and the oceans.
Therefore
, each
individual
instead
of going by public transport,
for example
, buses, cars, motorbikes, and
so
on should go walk or
use
a bicycle to their offices. It not
only
helps
people
healthier and
keeps
fit
but
it
also
can be a word to say reject to
companies
using fossil fuels emit hazardous gases into our aerial.
Moreover
, a human can grow the trees in his/her
house
due to its huge advantages.

On the other hand
, the
government
should take action for environmental problems
because
they have more power than
individuals
.
For example
, Belgium's authorities announced that polluting vehicles will not be
allowed
to enter the center city in order to
reduce
the emissions. This action immediately received
many
positive
feedbacks from the city-dwellers and neighboring countries.

In conclusion
, the problem of the
environment
should
be tackled
by both
individuals
and
governments
. I believe our nature will be cleaner in someday.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
13Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think individuals cannot do anything to make the environment different, others think they can. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
302 words
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