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Some people think certain prisoners should be made to do unpaid community work instead of being put behind the bar. To What extend do you agree ?

In the last few decades, how to treat with the criminals, it has been Concerning issue for the government and society. A few individual opine that government should compulsory doing unpaid work for the prisoners, in liue of Put in the jail. I partially agree with the statement. My explanation is justified in further paragraphs. To begin, there are many reasons for prisoners doing volunteering work for community. Predominant reason is that they are being respectful person and useful for the society and nation after they relive the bar. To elaborate this, they are working for society: Cleaning the street; Planting the trees; working for charity and many more, they indulge in this activities. Therefore, it can help to reduce the environment problems and prevent the become a harsh criminal. Another reason is that harsh evil minded and normal criminal are very different, therefore, treat with the different laws. For instance, according to LCB – London Central branch, myriad of counties treat their criminal according to their crime. Which can help to prevent the crime and become free crime city. On the contrary, the brutal offenders involved in series crime: Murder; Hijacking; Rape; and Abduction, these type of criminal, government not only put in the jail but also, must be doing a capital punishment. Owning to these harsh punishment, criminal have not been doing this type of crime. To add to this, if they are not keep in the bar, in liue of doing unpaid activities, they will have been repeating same crime and this is a terrible impact upon the societies and nation’s. Therefore, make a strict laws for lawbreakers. For an example, after the terrorist attack of 26/11 in Mumbai city upon taj hotel, a capita punishment of terrorist had been given by the government. In a concluding note, the government has been treating the criminal in different ways. Minor criminal are doing volunteering work and they become a good person. Capital punishment and send to the jail to harsh criminal by the government
In the last few decades, how to treat with the
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criminals
, it has been Concerning

issue for the
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government
and
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society
. A few individual opine that
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government


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should
compulsory
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doing
unpaid work for the prisoners, in
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liue
of Put in the jail. I

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partially
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agree
with the statement. My explanation
is justified
in
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further


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paragraphs
.

To
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begin
, there are
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many
reasons for prisoners
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doing
volunteering work for

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community
. Predominant reason is that they are being respectful person and
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useful


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for
the
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society
and nation after they relive the bar. To elaborate this, they
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are


working for
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society
: Cleaning the street; Planting the trees; working for charity

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and
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many
more, they indulge in
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this
activities.
Therefore
, it can
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help
to
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reduce


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the
environment problems and
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prevent
the become a
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harsh
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criminal
. Another

reason is that
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harsh
evil minded and normal
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criminal
are
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very
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different
,
therefore
,

treat with the
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different
laws.
For instance
, according to
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LCB
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–
London
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Central


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branch
, myriad of counties treat their
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criminal
according to their
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crime
. Which
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can


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help
to
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prevent
the
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crime
and become free
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crime
city.

On the contrary
, the brutal offenders involved in series
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crime
: Murder; Hijacking;

Rape; and Abduction, these type of
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criminal
,
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government
not
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only
put in the jail

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but
also
,
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must
be
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doing
a capital punishment. Owning to these
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harsh
punishment,

criminal have not been
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doing
this type of
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crime
. To
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add
to this, if they are not
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keep


in the bar, in
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liue
of
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doing
unpaid activities, they will have been repeating same

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crime
and this is a terrible impact upon the
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societies
and nation’s.
Therefore
,
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make


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a
strict laws for lawbreakers. For an example, after the terrorist attack of 26/11
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in


Mumbai city upon
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taj
hotel, a
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capita
punishment of terrorist had been
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given
by the

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government
. In a concluding note, the
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government
has been treating the
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criminal
in
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different


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ways
. Minor
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criminal
are
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doing
volunteering
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work and
they become a
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good


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person
. Capital punishment and
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send
to the jail to
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harsh
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criminal
by the
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government
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IELTS essay Some people think certain prisoners should be made to do unpaid community work instead of being put behind the bar.

Essay
  American English
25 paragraphs
335 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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