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Some people that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both these views and giv v.2

Some people that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. 2
Nowadays, people have more alternatives when it comes to university subjects. According to some, students should have an opportunity to choose what they would like to study, as they will not only enjoy studying but also will do better if they are interested in the subject. And there may be some merit in this view. Yet, in what follows it will be argued that, even though many don’t agree, students need to concentrate on subjects that will later be helpful in their future job, since they will have more time to gain profound knowledge about their profession and will be highly competitive in the job market. university students ought to learn only professional subjects, as this way more time can be left for studying useful materials and students can have a successful career. it is obvious that everyone is facing the issue of time management during university life. studying subjects that are only satisfying might be time-consuming. For instance, during my medical studies, I only had time to master my study materials, and being engaged in any other activities distracted my schedule. Moreover, by having mandatory classes at universities, one will be able to have a clear idea about her future tasks during work. Therefore, it will be easier to integrate into the job after graduation. On the other hand, others believe that students need to have options to study what they like. Firstly, studies are not only about responsibility, one should take pleasure while learning something. this will encourage students to study more properly. Secondly, students apply themselves more when they enjoy learning. many studies have shown that students get high grades from their elective subjects. In conclusion, it was demonstrated that universities should emphasize academic subjects, as students can have enough time to learn them thoroughly and have a prosperous career. though some argue that students should be allowed to learn their preferred subjects, since that can be fulfilled from studying and perform academically well.
Nowadays,
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people
have more alternatives when it
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to
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university
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subjects
. According to
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some
,
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students
should have an opportunity to choose what they would like to
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study
, as they will not
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only
enjoy
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studying
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but
also
will do better if they
are interested
in the
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subject
. And there may be
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some
merit in this view.
Yet
, in what follows it will
be argued
that,
even though
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many
don’t
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agree
,
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students
need to concentrate on
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subjects
that will later be helpful in their future job, since they will have more
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time
to gain profound knowledge about their profession and will be
highly
competitive in the job market.

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university
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students
ought to learn
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only
professional
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subjects
, as this way more
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time
can be
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left
for
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studying
useful materials and
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students
can have a successful career.
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it
is obvious that everyone is facing the issue of
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time
management during
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university
life.
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studying
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subjects
that are
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only
satisfying might be time-consuming.
For instance
, during my medical
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studies
, I
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only
had
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time
to master my
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study
materials, and
being engaged
in any other activities distracted my schedule.
Moreover
, by having mandatory classes at
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universities
, one will be able to have a
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clear
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idea
about her future tasks during work.
Therefore
, it will be easier to integrate into the job after graduation.

On the other hand
, others believe that
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students
need to have options to
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study
what they like.

Firstly
,
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studies
are not
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only
about responsibility, one should take pleasure while learning something.
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this
will encourage
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students
to
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study
more
properly
.
Secondly
,
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students
apply themselves more when they enjoy learning.
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many
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studies
have shown that
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students
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get
high grades from their elective subjects.

In conclusion
, it
was demonstrated
that
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universities
should emphasize academic
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subjects
, as
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students
can have
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enough
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time
to learn them
thoroughly
and have a prosperous career.
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though
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some
argue that
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students
should be
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allowed
to learn their preferred
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subjects
, since that can
be fulfilled
from
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
studying
and perform
academically
well.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
42Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
327 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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