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Some people that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both these views and giv v.1

Some people that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. 1
Nowadays, imported food plays a significant role to cater the need of people. It is frequently believed that the consumption of local food would be beneficial for the environment and economy of a country. Whereas, I firmly believed, this development bears more benefits and greatly over-weigh the negative aspects. To begin with, the use of national products could discourage the imported items and at the same time encourage to farmers to produce more quality foods. By doing this, the economy level will boost up and make stronger to currency value of a country. For example, Turkish people highly prefer to native products and support the local manufacturers. As a result, they become one of the developed nations and many people around the globe, intent to immigrate in Turkey for a better life. Another vivid positive aspect is that imported food becomes a cause of pollution in terms of carbon dioxide and fossil fuels. Thus, the preference to local food would prevent the environment from all types of pollution. Moreover, it protects the country from global warming, which is totally resulted of pollution. In the contrary, a country can't grow all the foods in order to fulfill the needs of people. Therefore, the imported food plays an integral role and sometimes, it targets the very basic needs of people. For instance, Pakistan imports a lot of onions and tomato from India cater to the demand for residents. By way of conclusion, although it has become essential to bring food from other countries due to shortage. But, I believe that the shortage could be achieved by enchantment in productivity, if people start believing on local farmers. This will be beneficial for the country economy and leave positive impacts on environmental health.
Nowadays,
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imported
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food
plays a significant role to cater the need of
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people
. It is
frequently
believed that the consumption of
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local
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food
would be beneficial for the environment and economy of a
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country
. Whereas, I
firmly
believed, this development bears more benefits and
greatly
over-weigh the
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negative
aspects.

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begin
with, the
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use
of national products could discourage the
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imported
items and at the same time encourage to farmers to produce more quality
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foods
. By doing this, the economy level will boost up and
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make
stronger to currency value of a
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country
.
For example
, Turkish
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people
highly
prefer to native products and support the
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local
manufacturers.
As a result
, they become one of the developed nations and
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many
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people
around the globe, intent to immigrate in Turkey for a better life. Another vivid
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positive
aspect is that
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imported
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food
becomes a cause of pollution in terms of carbon dioxide and fossil fuels.
Thus
, the preference to
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local
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food
would
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prevent
the environment from all types of pollution.
Moreover
, it protects the
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country
from global warming, which is
totally
resulted of pollution.

In the contrary, a
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country
can't grow all the
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foods
in order to fulfill the needs of
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people
.
Therefore
, the
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imported
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food
plays an integral role and
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sometimes
, it targets the
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very
basic needs of
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people
.
For instance
, Pakistan imports
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a lot of
onions and tomato from India cater to the demand for residents.

By way of conclusion, although it has become essential to bring
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food
from other
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countries
due to shortage.
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But
, I believe that the shortage could
be achieved
by enchantment in productivity, if
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people
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start
believing on
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local
farmers. This will be beneficial for the
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country
economy and
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leave
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positive
impacts on environmental health.
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IELTS essay Some people that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
289 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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