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Some people support the idea of imposing taxes on fossil fuels (oil, coil and gas) in order to reduce energy consumption. Other people disagree with this approach. Consider the debate and its arguments, and come to your own conclusion. v.1

Some people support the idea of imposing taxes on fossil fuels (oil, coil and gas) in order to reduce energy consumption. Other people disagree with this approach. Consider the debate and its arguments, and come to your own conclusion. v. 1
Humankind is heavily dependent on the natural resources in their day-to-day life. Fossil fuels are one of the most highly consumed resources. It is argued by many that, government should introduce taxation of the use of such resources while many others oppose this argument. This essay will discuss both sides of the argument and draw a conclusion. Assuming that the taxes are not imposed, the use of petrol, diesel and other fossil fuels will continue and burgeon with the increase in population. This may lead to the resources being exhausted completely. To illustrate, an article published in the Times now magazine states that, if the consumption of petrol in motor vehicle continue at the same rate, there will be no petrol by the year 2100. Subsequently, this argument has unfavourable outcomes. However, on the other hand, if the counterpart argument about laying taxation is considered. The society may see the surge in usage of fossil fuel, but will also affect the motor vehicle sector immensely, which in return will reflect on the economic growth of the country. Thus, this might be a suitable option but, is not the solution to the problem in the long run. In addition to this argument, the government should use the taxes collected to fund its research and development department to develop a cost effective hybrid vehicle which can meet the need of the modern lifestyle, and as well, reduce the consumption of the such natural resources. To conclude, the argument to oppose imposing taxes has no base to it. Whilst by application of fuel taxes, and putting it to better use of providing solution to such crises will be of significant good for humankind.
Humankind is
heavily
dependent on the natural resources in their day-to-day life. Fossil
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fuels
are one of the most
highly
consumed resources. It
is argued
by
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many
that,
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government
should introduce taxation of the
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use
of such resources while
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many
others oppose this
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argument
. This essay will discuss both sides of the
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argument
and draw a conclusion.

Assuming that the
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taxes
are not imposed, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of petrol, diesel and other fossil
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fuels
will continue and burgeon with the increase in population. This may lead to the resources
being exhausted
completely. To illustrate, an article published in the Times
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now
magazine states that, if the consumption of petrol in motor vehicle continue at the same rate, there will be no petrol by the year 2100.
Subsequently
, this
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argument
has
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unfavourable
outcomes.

However
,
on the other hand
, if the counterpart
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argument
about laying taxation
is considered
. The society may
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see
the surge in usage of fossil
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fuel
,
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but
will
also
affect the motor vehicle sector
immensely
, which in return will reflect on the economic growth of the country.
Thus
, this might be a suitable option
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but
, is not the solution to the problem in the long run.
In addition
to this
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argument
, the
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government
should
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use
the
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taxes
collected to fund its research and development department to develop a cost effective hybrid vehicle which can
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meet
the need of the modern lifestyle, and
as well
,
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reduce
the consumption of the such natural resources.

To conclude
, the
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argument
to oppose imposing
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taxes
has no base to it. Whilst by application of
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fuel
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taxes
, and putting it to better
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of providing solution to such crises will be of significant
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
for humankind.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people support the idea of imposing taxes on fossil fuels (oil, coil and gas) in order to reduce energy consumption. Other people disagree with this approach. Consider the debate and its arguments, and come to your own conclusion. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
280 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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