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some people support the death penalty for the people who committed violent criemes.

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some people support the death penalty for the people who committed violent crimes. others say that the capital punishment is unacceptable in contemporary society. in my opinion, I strongly agree that the death penalty is the only way for those who commits violent crimes to get what they deserve. moreover, I will explain the positives and negatives of the death penalty in the next paragraph. first of all, the death penalty has a lot of positives. such as, the justice that will occur from the death penalty like for example, if any of the family's victim got killed the death penalty will do it's job to get the justice if the family want the criminal to face the same thing that happened to their victim. and if the criminal really did commit the crime he got accused of then its a really big win for the family and then the justice is taken properly and at the end the accused can get what he deserves. furthermore, the negatives of the death penalty can be really sad sometimes. for example, the family of the accused can get really sad sometimes and they would try all what they can to not see her or him get to face death penalty and its really painful to see someone you care about face death penalty. moreover, sometimes the accused could be innocent too and still face death penalty and no justice will be achieved in conclusion, I believe that there is no any better way for any criminal that commits violent crimes to face anything than facing death penalty because the chances of him being innocent are lower than the chances of him being guilty and it's the best way for criminals to get what they deserve
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support the death
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who committed violent
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others
say that the capital punishment is unacceptable in contemporary society.

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in
my opinion, I
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that the death
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is the
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only
way for those who commits violent
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crimes
to
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get
what they deserve.
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moreover
, I will
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the positives and negatives of the death
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such
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justice
that will occur from the death
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like
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, if any of the family's victim
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got
killed the death
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penalty
will do
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it's
job to
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face
the same thing that happened to their victim.
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did commit the
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crime
he
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accused of then
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win for the family and then the
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is taken
properly
and at the
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end
the accused can
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get
what he deserves.

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furthermore
, the negatives of the death
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for
example, the family of the accused can
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someone you care about
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death
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moreover
,
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sometimes
the accused could be innocent too and
still
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face
death
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and no
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will
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in conclusion
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any better way for any
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criminal
that commits violent
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to
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face
anything than facing death penalty

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because
the chances of him being innocent are lower than the chances of him being guilty and it's the best way for
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criminals
to
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get
what they deserve

IELTS essay some people support the death penalty for the people who committed violent criemes.

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
292 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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