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Some people spend more time reading books, while others prefer to watch TV. The former group is more likely to develop creative imaginations and have a much better grasp of language skills. Do you agree or disagree?

The significance of reading books has never been overlooked by any society. However, since the invention of TV sets, the habit of reading has been losing its popularity. While people can benefit from watching TV to some extent, I believe that it is reading that enhances our imagination and helps us acquire more language skills. Reading books is a great way to develop children’s intelligence and language skills. The major reason is that words enable readers to visualize what they read, and there is no restriction to / limit to such imaginative thinking. This subsequently enables book readers to assimilate information and build a world of fantasy. In addition, reading is an effective way of improving written language proficiency. The perfect example is that children who read extensively tend to have a higher level of writing skills than those who spend much of their time watching TV. Admittedly, watching TV can more or less make people knowledgeable and expressive. By watching different channels, viewers are likely to gain a wealth of information so that they can have a broader understanding of the world they live in. What is more, different TV programs are presented in languages of different styles, and therefore watchers can effectively enlarge their vocabulary. However, the sounds and photographs on TV can do harm to people’s imagination because when they watch a program, it is scientifically proven that their brain is hardly engaged. Consequently, this passive method of absorbing information undermines intellectual development of the viewer in the long run. To summarize, people should be encouraged to read books rather than watching TV as it allows more freedom for readers to imagine and improve their linguistic abilities. Watching TV can also be a great way to increase people’s knowledge, but people need to be mindful of the adverse impacts it has on them.
The significance of
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reading
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books
has never
been overlooked
by any society.
However
, since the invention of TV sets, the habit of
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reading
has been losing its popularity. While
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people
can benefit from watching TV to
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some
extent, I believe that it is
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reading
that enhances our imagination and
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helps
us acquire more
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language
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skills
.

Reading
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books
is a great way to develop children’s intelligence and
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language
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skills
. The major reason is that words enable readers to visualize what they read, and there is no restriction to / limit to such imaginative thinking. This
subsequently
enables
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book
readers to assimilate information and build a world of fantasy.
In addition
,
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reading
is an effective way of improving written
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language
proficiency. The perfect example is that children who read
extensively
tend to have a higher level of writing
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skills
than those who spend much of their time watching TV.

Admittedly
, watching TV can more or less
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make
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people
knowledgeable and expressive. By watching
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different
channels, viewers are likely to gain a wealth of information
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so
that they can have a broader understanding of the world they
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live
in.
What is more
,
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different
TV programs
are presented
in
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languages
of
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different
styles, and
therefore
watchers can
effectively
enlarge their vocabulary.
However
, the sounds and photographs on TV can do harm to
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people’s
imagination
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because
when they
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watch
a program, it is
scientifically
proven that their brain is hardly engaged.
Consequently
, this passive method of absorbing information undermines intellectual development of the viewer in the long run.

To summarize
,
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people
should
be encouraged
to read
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books
rather
than watching TV as it
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
allows
more freedom for readers to imagine and
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improve
their linguistic abilities. Watching TV can
also
be a great way to increase
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people’s
knowledge,
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but
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people
need to be mindful of the adverse impacts it has on them.

IELTS essay Some people spend more time reading books, while others prefer to watch TV. The former group is more likely to develop creative imaginations and have a much better grasp of language skills.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
306 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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