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Some people spend large amount of money to buy tickets for sports and cultural events. Is this a positive or negative development?

Some people spend large amount of money to buy tickets for sports and cultural events. Is this a positive or negative development? wBYYY

Spending enormous money on entertainment, especially for watching live sports or programs, has shown an increasing trend among the population. However, I agree that being relaxed and using money for that purpose is the right for each individual, also I believe that one can utilises that money for some other useful activities for needy. Undoubtedly, watching sports and cultural programs have been considered as a form of entertainment for all. This means that, after a hectic work schedule majority of people would think about any form of relaxation, here sports as well as cultural events plays a pivotal role. Moreover, while playing such events with payment, it helps to improve our revenue and particular place will be familiar internationally. For example, Green Field Stadium, which has been located in my native, conducts all national and international sport events recently. Consequently, it has become one of the most famous international sports hub in India. However, I think such expenditure can be seen as an extravaganza among rich people, it can be used for a person who has to meet various personal benefits, such as medical expenditure, educational and to feed one's family. In detail, economically sound categories use the money for various entertainment activities to relax and to maintain a workwork-life balance with family, owing to the fact that they are unaware of what other people could able to do with this amount of money. For instance, when I had been doing my graduation, one of my classmates, he always stayed away from all entertainment events, and later we found that he had been from a low income family, as a result he struggled a lot to pay even hostel and mess fee instead of took part in such programs. To conclude, I agree that, even though entertainment programs have numerous advantages personally and as a source of income to the country, I also believe that such an amount can be spend for meeting the needs of poor in our society.

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money
 on entertainment, especially
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live
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sports
 or programs, has shown an increasing trend among the population. However
, I This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquiesce
agree
 that being relaxed
 and using You use this word too often, consider replacing it withsalarywagewealthpaybillcash
money
 for that purpose is the right for each individual, also
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utilises
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money
 for This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a number of
some
 other useful activities for needy.

Undoubtedly
, watching You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfunathleticspastimegame
sports
 and cultural programs have been considered
 as a form of entertainment for all. This means that, after a hectic work schedule majority of This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
 would This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :reckonassumebelieveconsider
think
 about any form of relaxation, here You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfunathleticspastimegame
sports
as well
 as cultural You use this word too often, consider replacing it withaffaircrisisceremonystorythingholiday
events
 plays a pivotal role. Moreover
, while playing such You use this word too often, consider replacing it withaffaircrisisceremonystorythingholiday
events
 with payment, it This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :assists
helps
 to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :ameliorate
improve
 our revenue and particular place will be familiar internationally
. For example
, Green Field Stadium, which has been located
 in my native, conducts all national and international You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfunathleticspastimegame
sport
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withaffaircrisisceremonystorythingholiday
events
 recently. Consequently
, it has become one of the most This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:well-known
famous
 international You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfunathleticspastimegame
sports
 hub in India.

However
, I This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :reckonassumebelieveconsider
think
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seen
 as an extravaganza among rich This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
, it can be This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exploited
used
 for a person who This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:oughts to
has to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :attain
meet
 various personal benefits, such as medical expenditure, educational and to feed one's family. In detail, economically
 sound categories This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exploit
use
 the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withsalarywagewealthpaybillcash
money
 for various entertainment activities to relax and to maintain a Possible spelling mistake found.
workwork-life
 balance with family, owing to the fact that they are unaware of what other This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
Did you mean "could be able"?could be able
could able
 to do with this amount of You use this word too often, consider replacing it withsalarywagewealthpaybillcash
money
. For instance
, when I had been doing my graduation, one of my classmates, he always stayed away from all entertainment You use this word too often, consider replacing it withaffaircrisisceremonystorythingholiday
events
, and later we found that he had been from a low income family, as a result
 he struggled a lot to pay even hostel and mess fee instead
 of This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :participated
took part
 in such programs.

To conclude
, I This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquiesce
agree
 that, even though
 entertainment programs have numerous advantages personally
 and as a source of income to the country, I also
 believe that such an amount can be Consider using the past participle "spent"?spent
spend
 for meeting the needs of poor in our society. 