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Some people say that use of mobile phones should be banned in public places or crowded areas,while other disagree .Give your own opinion and relevant examples

Some people say that use of mobile phones should be banned in public places or crowded areas, while other disagree. Give your own opinion and relevant examples oj5w
Telecommunication technology has played a vital role in information sharing and bringing people closer. Its usage has become a basic necessity of life and one cannot image to live without mobile phones. Prohibition of cell phones in public places is laudable, but I don't agree fully and believe that their usage should be allowed in public places but with some restrictions. On the one hand, using mobile phones in public places can distract other people and divert their attentions. For instance, libraries where people reading material of interest can be easily distracted through ringtones of incoming calls or people talking over the phone loudly with their loved ones. Mobile phone usage in public places like hospitals can easily interfere with the medical equipment which can be harmful to the patient. Moreover, talking over the cell phone can increase the sufferings of the patients waiting in the room to see the doctor. Mobile phones can easily slip from the hand when someone bumps in departmental stores it will not only damage the devices but it can block the entire lane at the billing counter. Often the environment at shopping malls, stores and other public avenue is very noisy and talking over cell phones will add extra decibel. Moreover, its usage in Music galleries or prayers room can result in discomfort for others and spoil their entertainment or offerings. On the other hand, restricting usage of mobile phones in public places can keep people away to stay in touch with their loved one in case of emergency and so on. Mobile phones nowadays come up with cameras and other services like Email, Entertainment and so on. This would keep them away from capturing the pictures of events in music galleries or taking selfies in public buses and sharing with their friends on the go. Moreover, people love to listen to music during travelling will have little to enjoy. Cell phones can easily be switched to silent/vibrate mode, this will not distract people due to loud ringtones of incoming calls or messages. To conclude, the above points provide plausible arguments in favour of both views. However, I personally believe that cell phones should be allowed in public places but with some restrictions in place so that they can remain in touch with their friends and family members whenever they need.
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people
closer. Its
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usage
has become a basic necessity of life and one cannot image to
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live
without mobile
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phones
. Prohibition of
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cell
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phones
in
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public
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places
is laudable,
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but
I don't
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agree
fully
and believe that their
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usage
should be
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allowed
in
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public
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places
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but
with
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some
restrictions.

On the one hand, using mobile
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phones
in
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public
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places
can distract
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other
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people
and divert their attentions.
For instance
, libraries where
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people
reading material of interest can be
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easily
distracted through ringtones of incoming calls or
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people
talking over the
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phone
loudly
with their
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loved
ones. Mobile
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phone
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usage
in
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public
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places
like hospitals can
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easily
interfere with the medical equipment which can be harmful to the patient.
Moreover
, talking over the
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cell
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phone
can increase the sufferings of the patients waiting in the room to
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see
the doctor. Mobile
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phones
can
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easily
slip from the hand when someone bumps in departmental stores it will not
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only
damage the devices
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but
it can block the entire lane at the billing counter.
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Often
the environment at shopping malls, stores and
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other
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public
avenue is
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very
noisy and talking over
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cell
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phones
will
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add
extra decibel.
Moreover
, its
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usage
in Music galleries or prayers room can result in discomfort for others and spoil their entertainment or offerings.

On the
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other
hand, restricting
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usage
of mobile
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phones
in
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public
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places
can
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keep
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people
away to stay in touch with their
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loved
one in case of emergency and
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so
on. Mobile
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phones
nowadays
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come
up with cameras and
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other
services like Email, Entertainment and
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so
on. This would
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keep
them away from capturing the pictures of
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events
in music galleries or taking selfies in
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public
buses and sharing with their friends on the go.
Moreover
,
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people
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love
to listen to music during travelling will have
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to enjoy.
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Cell
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phones
can
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easily
be switched
to silent/vibrate mode, this will not distract
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people
due to loud ringtones of incoming calls or messages.

To conclude
, the above points provide plausible arguments in
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favour
of both views.
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, I
personally
believe that
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phones
should be
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allowed
in
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places
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but
with
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some
restrictions in
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place
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so
that they can remain in touch with their friends and family members whenever they need.
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IELTS essay Some people say that use of mobile phones should be banned in public places or crowded areas, while other disagree. Give your own opinion and relevant examples

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  American English
4 paragraphs
387 words
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