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Some people say that use of mobile phones should be banned in public places or crowded area,while others disagree. Give your own opinion

Some people say that use of mobile phones should be banned in public places or crowded area, while others disagree. Give your own opinion dRDX
Mobiles have made communication easier and more convenient. However, sometimes people talking on their mobile phone disturb the surrounding environment and the general public. Because of this reason, several people have opined that the use of mobile phones should be banned in public places like libraries, shops and on buses and trains. I agree with this view. When people traveling on a bus or train make or receive calls on their mobile phone, they are causing a great deal of disturbance to other passengers. In order to ensure that the listener can hear properly, the caller often talks too loudly. This can disturb fellow passengers who may be reading or sleeping. And when people driving a vehicle talk on their mobiles, it can result in fatal accidents. This cannot be allowed at all. Libraries are another place where the use of mobile phones should be banned or discouraged. Library is meant for reading and thinking. If people use mobile phones when they are inside the library, they will unnecessarily disturb other people reading or studying there. By simply banning mobiles in public places, we cannot perhaps solve this problem. We also need to create awareness about the proper and polite way to use mobiles in public places. Mobile phones have become an integral part of our lives. In fact, most of us can’t even imagine a life without our mobiles. They are also a blessing in emergencies. In such situations, their use must be permitted. To conclude, there is a real need to ban the use of mobile phones in public places. It is true that they are a necessity and have enriched our lives in many ways, but their excessive use in public places must be discouraged at any cost
Mobiles have made communication easier and more convenient.
However
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sometimes
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people
talking on their mobile
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phone
disturb the surrounding environment and the general
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public
.
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reason, several
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people
have opined that the
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use
of mobile
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phones
should
be banned
in
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public
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places
like libraries, shops and on buses and trains. I
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agree
with this view.

When
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people
traveling on a bus or train
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make
or receive calls on their mobile
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phone
, they are causing a great deal of disturbance to other passengers. In order to ensure that the listener can hear
properly
, the caller
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often
talks too
loudly
. This can disturb fellow passengers who may be reading or sleeping. And when
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people
driving a vehicle talk on their mobiles, it can result in fatal accidents. This cannot be
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allowed
at all.

Libraries are another
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place
where the
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use
of mobile
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phones
should
be banned
or discouraged. Library
is meant
for reading and thinking. If
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people
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use
mobile
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phones
when they are inside the library, they will
unnecessarily
disturb other
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people
reading or studying there.

By
simply
banning mobiles in
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public
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places
, we cannot perhaps solve this problem. We
also
need to create awareness about the proper and polite way to
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use
mobiles in
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public
places.

Mobile
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phones
have become an integral part of our
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lives
. In fact, most of us can’t even imagine a life without our mobiles. They are
also
a blessing in emergencies. In such situations, their
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use
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must
be permitted
.

To conclude
, there is a real need to ban the
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use
of mobile
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phones
in
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public
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places
. It is true that they are a necessity and have enriched our
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lives
in
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many
ways,
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but
their excessive
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use
in
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public
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places
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must
be discouraged
at any
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cost

IELTS essay Some people say that use of mobile phones should be banned in public places or crowded area, while others disagree. Give your own opinion

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290 words
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