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Some people say that TV advertisements have benefits, while others believe the opposite. Discuss both views, give your own opinion and include examples from your experience.

Advertisements are supposed to be the form of mass communication. Presently, some people assert that advertisements shown on television are lucrative for people in many ways. By contrast, others have conflicting views. In my view, advertisements have more advantages than disadvantages. This essay intends to discuss both views before reaching a valid conclusion. There are multifarious points to endorse the former view. First and the foremost, watching advertisements enables people to become skilful shoppers. They can buy the superior collection for themselves with the help of advertisements. To demonstrate, watching adverts give people a window to the latest and exclusive products that are coming in the market with astonishing features and facilities. In addition, people get to know about the special offers, heavy discounts on products and various schemes that are run by the commercial sectors. Consequently, advertisements play a phenomenal role to uplift the standard of shopping. What is more, some advertisements also spread social awareness about general issues related to health, environment, cleanliness, and government policies. Thus, people become advance and lift up their standard of living. On the contrary, opposite wind is also there. To commence with, advertisements are making people extravagant in every part of the world. Buying things unnecessarily has become the habit of modern people. To illustrate, advertisements exaggerate the information about products by adding spice into the real story. Advertisement broadcasters not only hire prominent celebrities to endorse their products but also show products in gorgeous packaging. This really allures people towards products and they get encouraged to buy things whether they need or not. Lastly, advertisements promote excessive consumerism and it ultimately leads to the problem of rubbish and some environment concerns. To recapitulate, undeniably, advertisements have few negative outcomes. However, I still believe that adverts are extremely beneficial for people to lift up their standards of shopping and social awareness.
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Advertisements
are supposed
to be the form of mass communication.
Presently
,
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some
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people
assert that
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advertisements
shown on television are lucrative for
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people
in
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many
ways. By contrast, others have conflicting
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views
. In my
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view
,
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advertisements
have more advantages than disadvantages. This essay intends to discuss both
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views
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before
reaching a valid conclusion.

There are multifarious points to endorse the former
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view
.
First
and the foremost, watching
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advertisements
enables
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people
to become
Possible spelling mistake. ‘skilful’ is British English.
skilful
shoppers. They can
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buy
the superior collection for themselves with the
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help
of
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advertisements
. To demonstrate, watching adverts give
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people
a window to the latest and exclusive
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products
that are coming in the market with astonishing features and facilities.
In addition
,
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people
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get
to know about the special offers, heavy discounts on
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products
and various schemes that
are run
by the commercial sectors.
Consequently
,
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advertisements
play a phenomenal role to uplift the standard of shopping.
What is more
,
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some
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advertisements
also
spread social awareness about general issues related to health, environment, cleanliness, and
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government
policies.
Thus
,
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people
become advance and
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lift up
their standard of living.
On the contrary
, opposite wind is
also
there.

To commence with,
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advertisements
are making
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people
extravagant in every part of the world. Buying things
unnecessarily
has become the habit of modern
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people
. To illustrate,
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advertisements
exaggerate the information about
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products
by adding spice into the real story.
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Advertisement
broadcasters not
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only
hire prominent celebrities to endorse their
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products
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but
also
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show
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products
in gorgeous packaging. This
really
allures
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people
towards
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products and
they
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get
encouraged to
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buy
things whether they need or not.
Lastly
,
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advertisements
promote excessive
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consumerism and
it
ultimately
leads to the problem of rubbish and
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some
environment concerns.

To recapitulate,
undeniably
,
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advertisements
have few
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negative
outcomes.
However
, I
still
believe that adverts are
extremely
beneficial for
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people
to
This phrase is redundant. Consider using “lift”.
lift up
their standards of shopping and social awareness.
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IELTS essay Some people say that TV advertisements have benefits, while others believe the opposite.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
309 words
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