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The advantages of working from home always outweigh the disadvantages. Do you agree or disagree? Support your views with an example.

Before embarking on college many young people are advised that a year working or travelling may be a good option. This essay will suggest that saving money is the biggest advantage of this and a reduced motivation to study is the primary disadvantage. Third level education is very expensive and lots of students decide to work for 12 months and save up money before they begin their studies. This allows them to pay for their living costs, tuition fees and accommodation and focus on their studies, rather than struggle financially or have to get a part-time job on top of their academic work. The Times recently reported that the average student at a UK university requires over $12, 000 per annum just to survive and many drop out because they cannot afford to stay. Despite these advantages, many students often get used to working or travelling and don’t want to return to a life of study after a year off. This short term view can cause some to bypass university altogether and go straight into a job that is beneath their capabilities or may not offer the same prospects their future career might have done. For instance, a recent survey by the British Government found that 26% of students who take a gap-year never enter tertiary education. In conclusion, taking a break from studies can be advantageous if it allows people to gather up savings, however, they should also be careful that it does not lead to disillusionment with education altogether.
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embarking on college
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are advised
that a year working or travelling may be a
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good
option. This essay will suggest that saving money is the biggest advantage of this and a
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reduced
motivation to
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study
is the primary disadvantage.

Third level education is
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very
expensive and lots of
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students
decide to work for 12 months and save up money
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before
they
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begin
their
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studies
. This
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allows
them to pay for their living costs, tuition fees and accommodation and focus on their
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studies
,
rather
than struggle
financially
or
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have to
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get
a part-time job on top of their academic work. The Times recently reported that the average
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student
at a UK university requires over $12, 000 per annum
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just
to survive and
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many drop
out
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because
they cannot afford to stay.

Despite these advantages,
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students
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often
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get
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to working or travelling and don’t want to return to a life of
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study
after a year off. This short term view can cause
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some
to bypass university altogether and go straight into a job
that is
beneath their capabilities or may not offer the same prospects their future career might have done.
For instance
, a recent survey by the British
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Government
found that 26% of
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students
who take a gap-year never enter tertiary education.

In conclusion
, taking a break from
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studies
can be advantageous if it
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allows
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people
to
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gather up
savings,
however
, they should
also
be careful that it does not lead to disillusionment with education altogether.
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IELTS essay The advantages of working from home always outweigh the disadvantages. Support your views with an example.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
251 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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