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Some people say that traffic accidents are caused by the increasing number of motorbikes. Others blame for man’s fault. Which point of view do you agree? State at least three relevant evidences.

Some people say that traffic accidents are caused by the increasing number of motorbikes. Others blame for man’s fault. Which point of view do you agree? State at least three relevant evidences. 9Ybr0
In today’s modern society, traffic problem is seem to be frequently occur. Many people said that it caused by the increasing amount of motorbike but i feel that it seem to be caused by the human’s fault. On the one hand, it is universally accepted that most of the traffic casualties are caused by the bad awareness of the road user. Some people don’t wear helmet, blow the red light, … but the main cause of this serious problem i think it is the overspeeding. Many people go to fast that they can’t handle the speed. As a result a undersirable situation happen. On the other hand, a large number of traffic incidents are caused by young people’s careless driving. Many of them are not mature enough to fully understand the serious consequences of their actions or to be responsible for what they caused. In addition, as far as i know rudimentary vehicals is aslo a reason of this traffic problem. Many of them seem almost impossible to identify the shape or the brand of the vehical. They are not safe enough to join traffic because it is very easy to suddenly fall apart. In conclusion, i strongly support the goverment to raise the road user’s awareness, it is the best solution to enhance the transport system and aslo reduce the traffic accidents
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said that it
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caused
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but
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i
feel that it seem to be
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caused
by the human’s fault.

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universally
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accepted
that most of the
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traffic
casualties are
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caused
by the
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bad
awareness of the road user.
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Some
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people
don’t wear helmet, blow the red light, …
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but
the main cause of this serious problem
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i
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it is the
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overspeeding
.
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people
go to
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that they can’t handle the speed.
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undersirable
situation happen.

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,
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a large number of
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traffic
incidents are
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caused
by young
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people’s
careless driving.
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Many
of them are not mature
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enough
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fully
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, as far as
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i
know rudimentary
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vehicals
is
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aslo
a reason of this
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traffic
problem.
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of them seem almost impossible to identify the shape or the brand of the
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vehical
. They are not safe
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enough
to
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join
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traffic
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it is
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very
easy to
suddenly
fall apart.

In conclusion
,
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i
strongly
support the
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goverment
to raise the road user’s awareness, it is the best solution to enhance the transport system and
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aslo
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reduce
the
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traffic
accidents

IELTS essay Some people say that traffic accidents are caused by the increasing number of motorbikes. Others blame for man’s fault. Which point of view do you agree? State at least three relevant evidences.

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