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Some people say that tourism has many negative effects on the countries that people travel to. How true is this statement? What can tourists do to reduce the harmful effects of tourism on local cultures and environments?

Some people say that tourism has many negative effects on the countries that people travel to. How true is this statement? What can tourists do to reduce the harmful effects of tourism on local cultures and environments? wDeN
Nowadays, many countries are known for developed tourism. That brings a lot of benefits to them. However, there are some opinions that damage the local cultures and environments in the countries that people travel to. I firmly believe it is totally true and I will give some solutions to reduce the harmful effects. The growth of tourists can also affect the environment. In order to serve more and more travellers, the tourism industry has to build many hotels, restaurants that lead to reduced natural areas and deforestation. For example, instead of enjoying the natural views or attractive sightseeing in Da Nang to Hoi An in Vietnam with white sand and blue sea, it is covered by many resorts and luxury hotels. Beside that, it is also important to realize that tourism has harmed the local cultures. Because the number of travellers has increased, especially the foreigner, which contributes to raise domestic prices higher. In addition, the people living around also do that as well for higher income. They are influenced by overseas cultures, ignore their own traditions, which might lead to problems for preserving the traditional cultures. Such negative impacts can be reduced or avoided by several effective ways. Instead of just travelling to well-known places many times or just in resorts the whole day, tourists can join in some new adventures such as sailing, canoeing or focus on preserving the environment and enjoy new experiences. In addition, observing the rules and respecting local cultures are two main points which tourists should also remember. In conclusion, I believe that tourism also has negative effects on the local cultures and environments. In my opinion, although tourism will help the countries developly, we have to preserve and respect the local cultures and protect the natural environments.
Nowadays,
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many
countries
are known
for developed
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tourism
. That brings
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a lot of
benefits to them.
However
, there are
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some
opinions that damage the
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local
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cultures
and
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environments
in the countries that
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people
travel to. I
firmly
believe it is
totally
true and I will give
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some
solutions to
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reduce
the harmful effects.

The growth of tourists can
also
affect the
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environment
. In order to serve more and more
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travellers
, the
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tourism
industry
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has to
build
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many
hotels, restaurants that lead to
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reduced
natural areas and deforestation.
For example
,
instead
of enjoying the natural views or attractive sightseeing in
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Da
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Nang
to
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Hoi
An in Vietnam with white sand and blue sea, it
is covered
by
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many
resorts and luxury hotels.

Beside that, it is
also
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important
to realize that
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tourism
has harmed the
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local
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cultures
.
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Because
the number of
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travellers
has increased,
especially
the foreigner, which contributes to raise domestic prices higher.
In addition
, the
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people
living around
also
do that
as well
for higher income. They
are influenced
by overseas
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cultures
,
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ignore
their
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own
traditions, which might lead to problems for preserving the traditional cultures.

Such
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negative
impacts can be
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reduced
or avoided by several effective ways.
Instead
of
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just
travelling to well-known places
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many
times or
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just
in resorts the whole day, tourists can
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join
in
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some
new adventures such as sailing, canoeing or focus on preserving the
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environment
and enjoy new experiences.
In addition
, observing the
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rules
and respecting
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local
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cultures
are two main points which tourists should
also
remember.

In conclusion
, I believe that
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tourism
also
has
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negative
effects on the
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local
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cultures
and
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environments
.
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In
my opinion, although
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tourism
will
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help
the countries
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developly
, we
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have to
preserve and respect the
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local
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cultures
and protect the natural
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environments
.
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IELTS essay Some people say that tourism has many negative effects on the countries that people travel to. How true is this statement? What can tourists do to reduce the harmful effects of tourism on local cultures and environments?

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
294 words
6.0
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