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Some people say that tourism has many negative effects on the countries that people travel to. How true is this statement? What can tourists do to reduce the harmful effects of tourism on local cultures and environments v.4

Some people say that tourism has many negative effects on the countries that people travel to. How true is this statement? What can tourists do to reduce the harmful effects of tourism on local cultures and environments v. 4
People who live in tourist area was earned more income from the tourism industry. It means they have to provide more facilities for visitor’s comfort. This status leads them toward some disadvantage which may original residents was brought dissatisfied. The environment had affected by the tourism industry. Tourists have not attended to their destination because they come from different culture and some of them changed environment face with garbage. For instance, Gilan jangles were filled with plastic that passengers release them in crossing of the road. Although, people that their residence are in the tourist area, cut the trees for building the hotel or recreation area, but they do not know this activity has affected their atmosphere because its result is air pollution. In addition, tourism can have effected to traffic. When travellers rush to tourist cities they cause traffic congestion. This not only make their travels boring, it effected on inhabitant’s routine life. For example, in Noruz in north of Iran people hunt difficulty in streets and roads. Also, the behaviour of the original inhabitants may be effected by travellers with different culture. Because they want to attract the visitors and they try to provide all things, even they behave like travelling, that it is worst. I think knowing another culture has many profit, but every person should protect of own culture. On the other hands, it is clear that tourism has some uselessness, but we should not forget its usefulness. For example, economics of numerous countries is based on tourism. Tourist industry provides many job opportunities, make modern city for their inhabitants and cause knowing another culture that we never have seen. Moreover, travelling changes people's mood that without tourist industry and beautiful place we cannot achieve them. Overall, if we know and observe some rules, travelling will become the most popular industry for earning money and fill the leisure time. In my view if local government equip some laws, this situation is going to better. For instance, laws for protecting of the environment, for building and traffic jam. In the end, every person should know how to behave in tourist location.
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area
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more income from the
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tourism
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industry
. It means they
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provide more facilities for visitor’s comfort. This status leads them toward
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some
disadvantage which may original residents
was brought
dissatisfied.

The environment had
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affected
by the
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tourism
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industry
.
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Tourists
have not attended to their destination
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different
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culture
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of them
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changed
environment face with garbage.
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Gilan
jangles
were filled
with plastic that passengers release them in crossing of the road. Although,
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people
that their residence are in the
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tourist
area,
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the trees for building the hotel or recreation area,
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they do not know this activity has
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affected
their atmosphere
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its result is air pollution.

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can have effected to traffic.
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travellers
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cities they cause traffic congestion. This not
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their travels boring, it effected on inhabitant’s routine life.
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in north of Iran
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hunt difficulty in streets and roads.

Also
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travellers
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culture
.
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visitors and
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knowing another
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culture
has
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,
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every person should protect of
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own
culture.

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that
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has
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uselessness,
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we should not forget its usefulness.
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, economics of numerous countries
is based
on
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tourism
.
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industry
provides
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many
job opportunities,
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make
modern city for their inhabitants and cause knowing another
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culture
that we never have
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seen
.
Moreover
, travelling
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changes
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people
's mood that without
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tourist
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industry
and
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beautiful
place we cannot achieve them.

Overall
, if we know and observe
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some
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rules
, travelling will become the most popular
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industry
for earning money and fill the leisure time. In my view if local
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government
equip
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some
laws, this situation is going to better.
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, laws for protecting of the environment, for building and traffic jam. In the
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end
, every person should know how to behave in
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tourist
location.
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21Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people say that tourism has many negative effects on the countries that people travel to. How true is this statement? What can tourists do to reduce the harmful effects of tourism on local cultures and environments v. 4

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
354 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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