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Some people say that the internet will soon become the preferred method of delivery of the news and information, causing the newspapers and magazines to gradually disappear. Do you agree or disagree. Give your opinion and include examples from your knowledge and experience.

Some people say that the internet will soon become the preferred method of delivery of the news and information, causing the newspapers and magazines to gradually disappear. Give your opinion and include examples from your knowledge and experience. 5PVn
With the advent of technology, people are now getting news not only from printed bulletins but also from online media. Consequently, there has been a growing body of opinion that in the near future, newspapers and mags will not be published down to giving more priorities to the internet by individuals for delivering information. Being a rational mind, I, too, assent to this notion, for I am of the view that the internet happens to be beneficial to minimize cost and maximize efficiency. Among the ratiocination, the one that stands out deals with the significance of the internet as a way of saving money in case of transferring information, news and so forth. To be more precise, the cost of advertisements or any type of news on the online portals is much lower than that of printed media. In order to reduce cost, hence, people are now choosing the internet for sharing information, resulting in a dramatic fall in the sales of newspapers and magazines. To exemplify, in the USA, four newspaper mills are closed down in 2019 due to having consequently lost in the last five years and it is forecasted to be shut down another six magazine companies. Another rationale in reference to why the internet will be the best way to deliver information is necessarily synonymous with increasing productivity by saving valuable time. In other words, reporters are now able to depict their performance by presenting information to the world within a second through uploading news on the internet, whereupon they do not have to waste their precious time to put out news in newspapers or magazines. To cite an example, an empirical study by Cambridge University reveals that online newspaper reporters are twice active and efficient than that of printed media’s reporters. Therefore, there is more chance that journalists will choose the internet to provide information in the future, causing the disappearance of newspapers and magazines. In essence, to have an opportunity to save money and increase efficiency, the internet will indubitably become the preferred delivery method, resulting in the disappearance of printed papers.
With the advent of technology,
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people
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now
getting
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news
not
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only
from
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printed
bulletins
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but
also
from online media.
Consequently
, there has been a growing body of opinion that in the near future,
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newspapers
and mags will not
be published
down to giving more priorities to the internet by individuals for delivering
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information
. Being a rational mind, I, too, assent to this notion, for I am of the view that the internet happens to be beneficial to minimize cost and maximize efficiency.

Among the ratiocination, the one that stands out deals with the significance of the internet as a way of saving money in case of transferring
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information
,
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news
and
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so
forth. To be more precise, the cost of advertisements or any type of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
news
on the online portals is much lower than that of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
printed
media. In order to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
cost,
hence
,
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people
are
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now
choosing the internet for sharing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
information
, resulting in a dramatic fall in the sales of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
newspapers
and magazines. To exemplify, in the USA, four
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
newspaper
mills
are closed
down in 2019 due to having
consequently
lost in the last five years and it
is forecasted
to
be shut
down another six magazine
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companies
.

Another rationale in reference to why the internet will be the best way to deliver
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information
is
necessarily
synonymous with increasing productivity by saving valuable time.
In other words
, reporters are
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
able to depict their performance by presenting
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
information
to the world within a second through uploading
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
news
on the internet, whereupon they do not
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
waste their precious time to put out
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
news
in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
newspapers
or magazines. To cite an example, an empirical study by Cambridge University reveals that online
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
newspaper
reporters are twice active and
Use "(efficient)" to make a comparison with this adjective.
efficient
than that of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
printed
media’s reporters.
Therefore
, there is more chance that journalists will choose the internet to provide
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
information
in the future, causing the disappearance of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
newspapers
and magazines.

In essence, to have an opportunity to save money and increase efficiency, the internet will
indubitably
become the preferred delivery method, resulting in the disappearance of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
printed
papers.
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IELTS essay Some people say that the internet will soon become the preferred method of delivery of the news and information, causing the newspapers and magazines to gradually disappear. Give your opinion and include examples from your knowledge and experience.

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